钥匙— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Work on grammatical accuracy, conciseness and clearer linking. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and remove repetition. Use one linking phrase to introduce an example and correct small mistakes (e.g. "it's make" → "they make"; "unit unit" → remove duplicate).

範例: Yes, I usually carry several keys because they make me feel secure and prepared. For example, if I need to lock my bike or open my storage unit, I always have the correct key with me, so I don’t waste time looking for it.

建議: Improve clarity and eliminate minor errors and awkward phrasing. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then briefly add specific supporting details (when, what happened, result). Use linking words like "fortunately" for coherence.

範例: Yes, I once lost my keys when I was at university. Fortunately, I had a spare key so I wasn’t locked out, and I found the missing key a few days later.

建議: Avoid contradictions and correct repetitive or incorrect phrases. Keep answers concise (max 4–5 sentences). Fix odd phrasing like "leave before I leave the house" and remove overly absolute claims like "I will never lose my key again." Provide one supporting reason and a short example routine.

範例: No, I rarely forget them because I always put my keys in my bag as soon as I get home. For example, I have a small hook by the door where I hang my bag, so I remember to take the keys with me when I go out.

建議: The answer is generally clear and relevant; improve fluency by using smoother linking and correcting small grammar mistakes (e.g. "a neighbor" → "a neighbour", "our siblings" → "my siblings"). Add a brief reason and an alternative solution to enrich the response.

範例: I don’t think it’s a good idea because it can be a security risk. Instead, I would give a spare key to a close family member, such as my parents or siblings, whom I trust, or use a secure key safe outside the house.

× I always carry multiple keys because it's make me feel safe and ready for anything.

✓ I always carry multiple keys because they make me feel safe and ready for anything.

The original sentence uses 'it's make', which is ungrammatical. The subject 'multiple keys' is plural, so use the plural pronoun 'they' and the base verb 'make' (present tense) to agree: 'they make me'. Also 'it's' (it is) is incorrect as it does not refer to the plural subject. Suggestion: match pronoun and verb number to the plural noun and avoid using 'it' for plural antecedents.

× For instance if I need to lock my bike or I get into my store unit unit I have a right key handy so that way.

✓ For instance, if I need to lock my bike or get into my store unit, I have the right key handy.

This sentence has several problems: word repetition ('unit unit'), unnecessary words ('so that way'), and incorrect structure with two verbs joined awkwardly ('or I get into'). Use parallel structure: 'if I need to lock... or get into...', remove repeated word, use the definite article 'the' with 'right key', and eliminate 'so that way'. Also add commas for clarity.

× Well, actually I lost my key a long time ago when I was a student at university.

✓ Well, actually I lost my keys a long time ago when I was a student at university.

The student later refers to a spare and 'the missing one', implying plural keys originally. Using plural 'keys' is more natural with 'a spare'. If the intention was a single key, keep 'key' but ensure consistency elsewhere. Suggestion: use 'keys' to match later references or adjust later sentences to singular consistently.

× I was the key to my accommodation, but luckily I had a spare so I wasn't locked out for long and I found the missing one a few days later.

✓ It was the key to my accommodation, but luckily I had a spare, so I wasn't locked out for long and I found the missing one a few days later.

'I was the key' is incorrect because the speaker cannot be the key; use 'It was the key' to refer to the lost item. Also add commas to separate clauses for clarity. The rest of the sentence is fine after this correction.

× I always put my keys in my purse because I leave before I leave the house, so I rarely forget them.

✓ I always put my keys in my purse before I leave the house, so I rarely forget them.

The phrase 'because I leave before I leave the house' is redundant and incorrect. Use the prepositional phrase 'before I leave the house' to indicate timing. Combine clauses into a single clear sentence: 'I always put my keys in my purse before I leave the house.'

× In fact, it's been about four years since I lost I last lost my keys, so I will never lose my key again.

✓ In fact, it's been about four years since I last lost my keys, so I will try not to lose them again.

The original has repetition 'lost I last lost' and a contradictory absolute 'I will never lose my key again' which is unrealistic and awkward in tense. Correct the temporal clause: 'since I last lost my keys'. For the second clause, use a realistic modal such as 'will try not to' or 'hope I won't' instead of the absolute 'will never'. Also ensure plural consistency: 'keys' and 'them'.

× I don't think it is good idea to leave my key with a neighbor because it could be a security risk.

✓ I don't think it is a good idea to leave my key with a neighbour because it could be a security risk.

The phrase needs the indefinite article 'a' before 'good idea': 'a good idea'. Also maintain consistent spelling for 'neighbour' if following British English; original had 'neighbor' and later 'neighbour' — choose one. Suggestion: include 'a' and keep consistent spelling.

× I would only give a spare key to my close family member like my parents or our siblings since I trust them more to look after my home.

✓ I would only give a spare key to a close family member, like my parents or siblings, since I trust them more to look after my home.

Several pronoun and noun issues: 'my close family member' should be 'a close family member' (indefinite), 'our siblings' is inconsistent with 'my' and should be 'siblings' or 'my siblings', and punctuation improves clarity. Use 'them' to refer back to 'parents or siblings' (plural). Suggestions: keep possessives consistent and use appropriate articles.