食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid hesitations and repetition, and use correct tense and subject-verb agreement.

範例: I like strawberry ice cream. It tastes refreshing and cheering, so I often eat it when I feel sad because the sweetness lifts my mood. For example, after a bad day at school I usually have a small bowl and feel much better.

建議: Begin with a clear past-focused topic sentence and use past tense consistently. Give a specific example and link it to a reason. Reduce filler words and ensure subject-verb agreement.

範例: When I was young, I loved strawberry ice cream. My mother often gave it to me as a treat when I did well at school, so I associated it with rewards and happy memories.

建議: Answer directly, use clearer linking words (e.g., 'in summer'/'in winter'), avoid repetition, and use correct sentence structure. Give a specific example of a seasonal dish and explain briefly why you choose it.

範例: Yes, I do. In summer I prefer cooling foods like ice cream or lemonade to beat the heat. In winter I enjoy hot pot because the warm broth and cooked vegetables help me stay warm and are comforting.

× I love it so much because it give.

✓ I love it so much because it gives me pleasure.

Subject 'it' (singular) requires the verb 'gives' (third person singular). The original used 'give' which is base form and incorrect for present simple with a singular subject. Suggestion: use 'gives' or rephrase with a gerund or noun (e.g., 'because it gives me a refreshing feeling').

× It gives, it gives me refreshing and relaxing feeling and I'll eat it when I was feeling depressed and after I eat something sweet I will feel better and happy.

✓ It gives me a refreshing and relaxing feeling, and I eat it when I feel depressed; after I eat something sweet I feel better and happier.

Multiple issues: 'feeling' needs an article 'a' and adjectives must be 'refreshing and relaxing'; tense consistency: use present simple for habitual actions ('I eat', 'I feel') not past ('I was feeling'). Use 'happier' (comparative) instead of 'happy' to show improvement. Also remove unnecessary future 'will' when describing habitual responses. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'gives' is correct with 'it'.

× Also the strawberry flavored ice cream because I love eating ice cream since I was little and my mom will always take it as a compliment for me when I'm doing good or having a good grade in school.

✓ Also strawberry-flavored ice cream, because I have loved eating ice cream since I was little, and my mom always gave it to me as a reward when I did well or had good grades in school.

Use 'have loved' or 'loved' with 'since I was little'—present perfect ('have loved') connects past to present. 'Will always take it as a compliment for me' is unnatural: for past habitual actions use past 'always gave it to me as a reward'. 'Doing good' should be 'doing well' and 'having a good grade' should be 'having good grades'. Maintain tense consistency and choose correct verbs for meaning ('reward' instead of 'compliment').

× Yes, I often eat different food in different times of year, especially different in winter and summer.

✓ Yes, I often eat different foods at different times of the year, especially between winter and summer.

Plural 'foods' is more natural when referring to varieties. Use preposition 'at' with 'times of the year' and include the definite article 'the'. 'Different in winter and summer' is awkward; use 'between winter and summer' or 'in winter and in summer'.

× So when I in when I am in summer, I often eat something refreshing, refreshing such as ice cream or lemonade.

✓ So when it is summer, I often eat refreshing things such as ice cream or lemonade.

Remove repeated phrase and correct structure: 'when it is summer' or 'in summer'. Use plural 'things' or an uncountable noun phrase 'something refreshing' without repetition. Keep present simple for habitual actions: 'I often eat'.

× In winter I often eat hot pot. Yeah, to make sure I'm warm.

✓ In winter I often eat hot pot to keep warm.

Combine the short fragment into one sentence; use 'keep warm' instead of 'make sure I'm warm' for naturalness. Present simple 'I often eat' is appropriate for habitual actions.