食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail about why you prefer salads (e.g., ingredients or benefits). Use a linking word when adding the extra detail.

範例: I really like salads, mainly because they keep me feeling fresh and healthy. For example, a typical salad I make has mixed greens, cherry tomatoes, avocado and grilled chicken, so it’s both nutritious and filling.

建議: Begin with a clear topic sentence and avoid repeating the same phrase. Provide one supporting reason or a brief example (e.g., a favourite meal or memory) and use a linking word to connect ideas.

範例: When I was young I loved eating chicken, fries and tacos, especially from fast-food restaurants. For instance, I used to look forward to weekend visits because the meals came with fun toys, which made them extra special.

建議: Give a clearer, full response: state directly whether you change your diet by season, then give specific examples and use linking words. Avoid filler words and unclear fragments.

範例: Yes, I change what I eat depending on the season. For example, in summer I eat more salads and fruits to stay cool, whereas in winter I prefer soups and stews to keep warm.

× My favorite food is salads because they help me to keep my to keep me fresh and healthier. And it's easy to prepare.

✓ My favorite food is salad because it helps keep me fresh and healthy, and it is easy to prepare.

The sentence has redundancy and incorrect adjective/adverb forms. 'Salads' as a general category is better expressed as 'salad' (uncountable general reference) — related to Article errors but primarily adjective use. 'They help me to keep my to keep me fresh and healthier' contains repeated phrase and wrong comparative 'healthier' without a comparison; use the adjective 'healthy'. Also use third-person singular verb 'helps' to agree with singular noun 'salad' and omit unnecessary 'to' before 'keep'. Combine fragments into one sentence for clarity.

× When I was young, I used to love eating chicken, fries and tacos. I used to love fast foods and the toys that came with them.

✓ When I was young, I used to love eating chicken, fries, and tacos. I used to love fast food and the toys that came with it.

'Fast foods' is awkward; 'fast food' is an uncountable noun when referring to the category. Keep consistent plural forms for items (commas added). 'The toys that came with them' refers to 'fast food' (singular category), so use 'it' for correct pronoun reference. Tense 'used to' is correct for past habitual actions.

× Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year. It depends on the season. Because it's an UMM.

✓ Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year because it depends on the season.

Fragment 'Because it's an UMM.' is incomplete and unclear. 'It depends on the season' should be connected to the previous sentence; combining them avoids sentence fragments. Remove 'UMM' as it is an interjection and not appropriate in a formal answer; if a filler is needed, use a brief pause rather than spoken 'umm' in written response.