食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct small grammar errors; organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'at other dishes' unclear). Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'light' and 'healthy').

範例: I really like sushi. Firstly, I enjoy the delicate texture and the freshness of the fish, which makes it feel light rather than heavy. In addition, dipping it in soy sauce adds flavor without making the meal greasy, so I consider it a healthy choice.

建議: Use past tense consistently and reduce repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two concise supporting reasons linked logically. Correct small errors ('cutting candy' unclear) and avoid repeating 'unique' and 'bright colors' twice.

範例: When I was young, my favourite was cotton candy. Children are usually attracted to bright, sweet treats, and cotton candy stood out because it was airy, sugary and came in vivid colours.

建議: Answer directly and give a specific example or pattern. Avoid vague repetition and explain how or why your choices change with time or season. Use linking words for clarity.

範例: Yes, I do. For example, in summer I tend to eat more salads and cold dishes, while in winter I prefer hot stews and soups because they are more comforting. Over the years I have also tried new cuisines, which has gradually changed my tastes.

建議: Use more fluent sentences and correct tense/forms (e.g., 'as I got older'). Provide one clear reason and a specific example of current preferences. Use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, it has. As I got older I became more aware of nutrition, so I moved away from sugary junk food. Now I prefer balanced meals like grilled fish, whole grains and vegetables because they make me feel healthier and more energetic.

× My favorite food is sushi because I really like the texture of it, the freshness of the fish in.

✓ My favorite food is sushi because I really like its texture and the freshness of the fish.

The original sentence misuses the preposition 'in' after 'the freshness of the fish' and uses an awkward phrase 'the texture of it.' Replace with the possessive pronoun 'its' and remove the incorrect 'in' to make the sentence natural and grammatically correct. Suggestion: use possessive pronouns (its) and avoid unnecessary prepositions.

× The fun thing is that you could dip it into some soy sauce and it's not as heavy.

✓ The fun thing is that you can dip it in some soy sauce and it's not as heavy.

Use of 'dip into' is not wrong but 'dip in' is more natural for food. Also use 'can' rather than 'could' to state a general ability/option in the present. Suggestion: use 'dip in' for sauces and 'can' for general present statements.

× At other dishes it's light and it could be considered healthy.

✓ Compared with other dishes, it's light and can be considered healthy.

'At other dishes' is incorrect prepositional use; use 'compared with' or 'compared to.' 'Could be considered' is wordy for a general statement; 'can be considered' is clearer. Suggestion: use proper comparison phrases and simple modal for general truths.

× My favorite food when I was young is probably cutting candy.

✓ My favorite food when I was young was probably cotton candy.

The sentence refers to the past, so the verb should be past tense 'was' not present 'is.' Also 'cutting candy' appears to be a wrong word choice; the intended item is 'cotton candy.' Suggestion: match tense to timeframe and use correct food name.

× And because I think that children tend to be interested in food that is unique, has bright colors and of course, sweet.

✓ I think children tend to be interested in food that is unique, has bright colors, and is, of course, sweet.

Sentence begins with 'And because' which creates a fragment when not connected properly. Also parallel structure requires repeating 'is' for the final adjective: 'is... and is...'. Rephrase to form a complete sentence and maintain parallelism. Suggestion: avoid starting sentences with conjunctions in formal speech and keep parallel adjective structures.

× And I think cotton candy is that one food that is really unique.

✓ I think cotton candy is a food that is really unique.

'That one food' is informal and redundant. Replace with 'a food' for clearer expression. Also remove leading 'And' to avoid sentence fragments. Suggestion: prefer concise nouns and avoid unnecessary demonstratives.

× It it's airy, it's sweet and it has bright colors.

✓ It's airy, it's sweet, and it has bright colors.

The original contains a typographical repetition 'It it's.' Removing the extra 'It' corrects the pronoun usage. Suggestion: proofread to remove duplicated words.

× Yes, I do, because I think I kept discovering more and more foods each year, each year.

✓ Yes, I do, because I keep discovering more and more foods every year.

'Kept discovering' is past tense and inconsistent with 'each year' meaning a recurring present action. Use present simple 'keep discovering' or 'have been discovering.' Also change 'each year, each year' repetition to 'every year.' Suggestion: use present tense for ongoing habits.

× So I think my taste in food could change per year.

✓ So I think my taste in food can change from year to year.

'Could change per year' is awkward. Use 'can change from year to year' to express habitual change. 'Can' indicates possibility and 'from year to year' is natural expression. Suggestion: use idiomatic time expressions.

× I think when I was a child I would prefer to eat food that has high sugar junk food.

✓ I think when I was a child I preferred to eat junk food that was high in sugar.

Mixes tenses and has incorrect word order. For past habitual preference use 'preferred.' 'High sugar junk food' is awkward; use 'junk food that was high in sugar.' Adjust verb agreement for past timeframe. Suggestion: use past tense consistently and natural noun phrases.

× And as I'm going older I learned a lot about diets and how nutrition is really important for me.

✓ And as I got older, I learned a lot about diets and how nutrition is really important for me.

Mixes present progressive 'I'm going older' with past 'learned.' Use 'got older' or 'grew older' for natural past reference. Suggestion: keep tense consistent when describing past events.

× So now I would prefer to eat that is very nutritious for me.

✓ So now I prefer to eat foods that are very nutritious for me.

'Prefer to eat that is very nutritious' is ungrammatical because 'that' does not correctly refer to a plural noun. Use plural 'foods' and plural verb 'are.' Also 'would prefer' suggests hypothetical; 'prefer' states current preference. Suggestion: use correct noun number and match verb accordingly.