食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and clear: state the food correctly, avoid repetition and filler words, and give one or two brief supporting details (how often you eat it and where it comes from). Use correct grammar (e.g. “I order it once a week” and “from a restaurant near my house”).

範例: My favourite food is pasta because I find it very tasty. I usually order it once a week from a small restaurant near my house because they make it fresh and with good sauce.

建議: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, reduce fillers, and give specific examples and a short reason. Use past tense for childhood (e.g. “I liked”).

範例: When I was young, I liked sweet dishes. For example, I often ate a traditional dessert called malai and other sugared treats, and people used to call me a ‘sweet tooth’ because I always chose sweets.

建議: Be coherent and use linking words to organize your answer. Use correct nouns and verbs (e.g. “different kinds of vegetables and fruits that come in season”). Give one clear seasonal example and explain briefly.

範例: Yes. I eat different fruits and vegetables depending on the season. For example, strawberries are popular in February and November, so I often buy and drink strawberry smoothies when they are in season.

建議: State clearly whether it changed, use past and present contrast with linking words (e.g. “when I was a child... but now...”); avoid hesitation and finish your reason (e.g. health concerns).

範例: Yes, it has changed. When I was a child I spent whole days eating sweet dishes, but now I prefer healthier foods because I learned that too many sweets are bad for my health.

× My favorite food is poster, which I find find very tasty and delicious.

✓ My favorite food is pasta, which I find very tasty and delicious.

The student used 'poster' likely by mistake; the correct noun is 'pasta'. Also 'find find' is a repetition (editing error) and should be a single 'find'. No grammatical tense change needed. Suggestion: proofread to remove duplicate words and check vocabulary choice.

× I always order for once in a week.

✓ I always order it once a week.

The phrase 'order for once in a week' has wrong preposition and word order. Use 'order it' to specify the food and 'once a week' is the correct adverbial phrase. Suggestion: use 'once a week' or 'one time a week' and place it after the verb phrase.

× Is and and from a a restaurant near our house and and also. Oh.

✓ It is from a restaurant near our house.

The original contains multiple filler words and repetitions ('and and', 'a a') and lacks clear subject-verb structure. Simplify to a clear subject ('It') + verb ('is') + prepositional phrase. Suggestion: remove fillers and repeated words to form a complete sentence.

× Uh, when I was young, I like all the sweet, sweet dishes, like uh, like, uh, uh, like, uh, in our traditions there is a, a, there is called uh, malai and sweet, sweet dishes and umm, uh, everyone call me sweet tooth because I, I always eat some things that is sweets and.

✓ When I was young, I liked all the sweet dishes. In our tradition there is a dish called malai, and everyone called me a sweet tooth because I always ate sweets.

Tense inconsistency: the context is past ('when I was young'), so verbs should be past tense ('liked', 'called', 'ate'). Article and noun errors: 'everyone call me sweet tooth' needs past tense and an article: 'called me a sweet tooth'. 'Some things that is sweets' is ungrammatical; 'sweets' suffices. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout when describing past habits and use appropriate articles.

× Uh, yes, of course I eat it's a, it's a different kinds of of vegetables and fruit that that came from the sea that came with seasons.

✓ Yes, of course I eat different kinds of vegetables and fruits that come with the seasons.

Pronoun and verb agreement: 'it's a' is incorrect and unnecessary. 'Different kinds' should match plural noun 'vegetables and fruits'. Use present simple 'come' for seasonal occurrences. 'From the sea' likely incorrect for vegetables and fruits, so omitted. Suggestion: remove unnecessary pronouns and match plurality between 'kinds' and the nouns.

× For example, like in November, in February, the strawberries is popular.

✓ For example, in November and February, strawberries are popular.

Subject-verb agreement: 'strawberries' is plural, so the verb must be 'are' not 'is'. Also streamline months list and remove extra 'like'. Suggestion: use plural verb with plural subject and avoid redundant filler words.

× So I, I might drinks strawberry.

✓ So I might drink strawberries.

After modal 'might', use base verb form 'drink', not 'drinks'. Also 'strawberry' should be plural or 'strawberry drinks' depending on meaning. Suggestion: use 'might drink strawberries' or 'might have strawberry drinks'.

× Yes, my favorite food has rapidly changed a lot in in in, in my childhood.

✓ Yes, my favorite food changed a lot during my childhood.

Use simple past 'changed' for a completed period (childhood). 'Has changed' (present perfect) with 'in my childhood' is mismatched. Remove repeated words and avoid redundant modifiers 'rapidly' and 'a lot' together. Suggestion: choose one modifier and correct tense: 'changed a lot during my childhood'.

× I rather spend my, my entire day eating sweet dishes, like I said before.

✓ I used to spend my entire day eating sweet dishes, as I said before.

'I rather spend' is unnatural for past habitual action; 'used to' expresses past habit. Remove repetition and keep tense consistent. Suggestion: use 'used to' + base verb to describe habitual past actions.

× But right now I, I find that, uh, I, I, I heard, uh, sweet dishes can't, I, uh, can negative.

✓ But right now I find that I don't like sweet dishes anymore.

Original is fragmented and unclear. To express change in preference use 'I don't like sweet dishes anymore' or 'I no longer like sweet dishes'. Avoid 'heard' and unclear 'can't... can negative'. Suggestion: state preference simply and use clear negation with 'do not' or 'don't'.