食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence naming your favourite dish, then give one or two specific details (ingredients, flavour, or when you eat it). Avoid fillers (umm, uh) and unclear words. Use linking words if adding details (for example, “because” or “also”).

範例: My favourite food is an Indian dessert called kheer. It is a rice pudding made with milk and sugar, and I often add chopped nuts for extra texture. I enjoy it after special family meals because it is sweet and comforting.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence about past preferences, then explain change with a reason and use past tense consistently. Reduce repetition and fillers. Add a linking word to show contrast (e.g., “but” or “however”).

範例: When I was young, I liked fast food such as pizza and burgers. However, as I grew older I stopped eating it often because I became more health-conscious and started preferring homemade meals.

建議: Start with a direct answer (yes/no) then support with specific examples and seasonal variations if any. Use linking words (for example, “because”, “for instance”). Mention any minor changes in ingredients or dishes across seasons to add detail.

範例: No, my diet is mostly the same throughout the year because I am a vegetarian. For instance, I usually eat chapati with vegetable curry and curd most days, but in summer I prefer lighter salads and in winter I include more warm lentil soups.

建議: Answer directly and use clear contrast words (“when I was a child” vs “nowadays”). Use past and present tenses correctly, avoid vague phrases, and give a specific example of a current favourite or a typical healthy meal. Explain briefly why the change happened.

範例: Yes, my favourite foods have changed since childhood. When I was a child I often preferred fast food and ice cream, but now I choose healthier options like grilled vegetables and brown rice because I focus on nutrition. I still have occasional cheat meals on weekends.

× I like Indian cuisines such umm there are many Indian cuisines which are my favorite umm the one is give which is one dozen made of rises, milk and sugar umm we can put some dry.

✓ I like Indian cuisine. There are many Indian dishes that are my favorites. One is 'gujiya', which is made of rice, milk, and sugar; we can add some dry fruits.

The student used plural 'cuisines' incorrectly; 'Indian cuisine' refers to the style of cooking (singular) and 'dishes' or 'recipes' for countable items. The original sentence was also run-on and unclear. Use 'cuisine' for the general category and 'dishes' for individual foods. Also corrected the likely dish name to 'gujiya' and 'dry fruits' for clarity. Suggestion: separate ideas into shorter sentences and choose 'cuisine' vs 'dishes' appropriately.

× When I was young, I like fast food, but nowadays I don't like that much.

✓ When I was young, I liked fast food, but nowadays I don't like it that much.

The time clause 'When I was young' sets the action in the past, so the verb should be past tense 'liked' not present 'like'. Also 'that much' needs an object 'it' to refer to fast food. Suggestion: match verb tense to time expressions and include pronouns for clarity.

× Also, uh, when I was young, I like, uh, foods like, uh, I like, uh, foods like pizza, burger, et cetera.

✓ Also, when I was young, I liked foods such as pizza and burgers.

Again the clause 'when I was young' requires past tense 'liked'. Reduce repetition and use 'foods such as' with plural 'burgers' for countable items. Suggestion: avoid filler words and repeat structures; use 'such as' or 'for example' and pluralize countable nouns.

× My food remains same throughout the year because I am vegetarian and don't prefer any meat items.

✓ My food remains the same throughout the year because I am a vegetarian and don't eat meat.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'same' ('the same'). 'Vegetarian' as a noun normally takes an article 'a vegetarian'. 'Don't prefer any meat items' is awkward; 'don't eat meat' is clearer. Suggestion: include articles where required and choose natural verbs ('eat' rather than 'prefer') for habits.

× So my vegetarian diet remains same such as a vegetable curd and chapati with some salad.

✓ So my vegetarian diet remains the same, such as vegetable curd and chapati with some salad.

Similar article issue: 'the same' needed. Also remove 'a' before uncountable 'vegetable curd' and keep parallel structure listing foods. Suggestion: maintain parallel noun forms when listing and use 'the same'.

× As I mentioned, I prefer possible when I was a kid, such as.

✓ As I mentioned, I preferred certain foods when I was a kid, such as fast food and ice cream.

The clause 'when I was a kid' requires past tense 'preferred' not present 'prefer'. 'Prefer possible' is incorrect and unclear; replace with 'preferred certain foods' and complete the example. Suggestion: ensure verbs match the time frame and avoid incomplete phrases.

× Fast food and ice creams, but nowadays I prefer take something healthy in every meal.

✓ I used to eat fast food and ice cream, but nowadays I try to eat something healthy at every meal.

Use 'used to' or past tense for past habits. 'Ice creams' should be 'ice cream' (uncountable for the general food). 'Prefer take something healthy' is ungrammatical; use 'try to eat something healthy' and 'at every meal' for the correct preposition. Suggestion: use 'used to' for past habits and correct verb patterns: 'try to eat'.

× Sometime I do cheat meal.

✓ Sometimes I do have a cheat meal.

Use plural 'Sometimes' and the correct verb collocation 'have a cheat meal' rather than 'do cheat meal'. 'Do' is unnecessary and changes meaning. Suggestion: use adverb 'sometimes' and the noun phrase 'a cheat meal' with verb 'have'.