食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence naming your favourite food, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct basic grammar (e.g. ‘ferry’ → ‘favourite’, ‘threw’ → ‘love’) and avoid unfinished clauses. Keep it to maximum five sentences.

範例: My favourite food is sweet bread, especially fruit cake. I enjoy it because the sweet flavours lift my mood and make me feel comforted. For example, I often eat a slice with tea when I’m stressed, and it always cheers me up.

建議: Use past tense for past habits and correct vocabulary (‘snakes’ → ‘snacks’). Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then give one specific example and a reason, linked by words like ‘because’ or ‘so’.

範例: When I was young, I loved eating snacks, especially potato chips. I used to buy them every weekend because I enjoyed munching them while watching TV.

建議: Answer directly and coherently: start with a clear yes/no and explain with specific seasonal examples. Use correct phrases (‘different times of the year’, ‘seasonal fruits’) and linking words like ‘for example’ or ‘in summer’ to organize ideas.

範例: Yes, I do eat different foods depending on the season. For example, in summer I prefer foods made with seasonal fruits such as mangoes, while in winter I tend to eat warm stews and soups.

建議: Use clear past and present contrast with correct grammar and structure. Begin with a direct statement about change (yes/no), then give specific details comparing childhood favourites with current preferences. Use linking words like ‘however’ or ‘now’ to show change.

範例: Yes, my favourite foods have changed since childhood. I used to love chips and apples and ate them nearly every week; however, now that I am older I prefer healthier options and rarely eat chips anymore.

× I think my ferry threw a sweet food like sweet bread or fruit cake.

✓ I think my favorite food is sweet items like sweet bread or fruit cake.

The original sentence uses incorrect nouns and pluralization: 'my ferry threw' is garbled and 'a sweet food' is unnatural. Change to 'my favorite food is sweet items' to use correct singular verb 'is' with the singular subject 'my favorite food' and use plural 'items' to refer generally to types of sweet foods. Also replace unclear words (ferry, threw) with intended 'favorite'.

× Sweet food will make people feel so happy and clear and if someone.

✓ Sweet foods make people feel happy and uplifted.

Problems include adjective/adverb misuse and sentence incompleteness. Use plural 'sweet foods' to refer generally; 'make people feel so happy and clear' is awkward—use 'happy and uplifted'. Remove the unfinished clause 'and if someone'. Also use simple present 'make' for general truth.

× The emotion in bad, Yeah.

✓ Their mood improves when they eat sweet foods.

Original is fragmentary and ungrammatical. 'The emotion in bad' is incorrect word order and word choice. Clarify meaning: refer to 'their mood' and specify change 'improves'. Use a full sentence and appropriate subject.

× When I was a kid, I prefer some snakes like chips.

✓ When I was a kid, I preferred snacks like chips.

Tense mismatch: the clause 'When I was a kid' sets past time, so verb should be past 'preferred' not present 'prefer'. Also 'snakes' is a spelling error for 'snacks'.

× I always bought chips in every weekend and I like to enjoy chips when I watch the TV.

✓ I always bought chips every weekend and I enjoyed them while watching TV.

Redundant article 'the' before 'weekend' is not needed; use 'every weekend'. Maintain past tense 'bought' and use past 'enjoyed' to match time frame. Use pronoun 'them' to avoid repetition and delete unnecessary article 'the' before 'TV'.

× You know, I like the food with fruit and fruits product and indifferent period of the year.

✓ I like foods with fruit and fruit products at different times of the year.

Incorrect prepositions and word forms: 'with fruit and fruits product' should be 'with fruit and fruit products'. 'indifferent period' likely intended 'different periods' and needs preposition 'at' for time: 'at different times of the year'.

× For example, if there's a summer, I vary, I prefer food with mangoes.

✓ For example, in summer I prefer foods with mangoes.

'If there's a summer' is unnatural; use 'in summer' for seasonal reference. 'I vary' is incorrect here and unnecessary. Use present simple 'prefer' for habitual preference. Use plural 'foods' to refer to types of dishes.

× Yeah, there are two food I like when I was a kid, chips and Apple.

✓ Yes, there were two foods I liked when I was a kid: chips and apples.

Tense should be past 'were/liked' to match 'when I was a kid'. 'Two food' should be plural 'two foods'. 'Apple' should be plural 'apples' to match 'chips' and because speaking generally.

× I almost enjoyed them every week.

✓ I ate them almost every week.

'Almost enjoyed them every week' is awkward; 'enjoyed' expresses feeling but 'ate them' is more natural to describe habitual consumption. Maintain past tense 'ate' to match timeframe.

× But when I get got into the universities, I don't like it. Apple and chips I like.

✓ But when I got into university, I didn't like apples and chips anymore.

Tense and form errors: 'get got' is incorrect; use past 'got'. 'Universities' is odd—use 'university' or 'college' singular for personal experience. Use past negative 'didn't like' to indicate change. Combine 'apple and chips I like' into 'apples and chips' and place appropriately; add 'anymore' to show change.