食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and directly state a clear preference or explain lack of preference with one strong topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and minor grammar errors (e.g., ‘favourite’ vs ‘favorite’ consistency, ‘it's my main’ unclear).

範例: I don't have a single favorite food because I'm adventurous and enjoy many cuisines. For example, I often eat Japanese and Korean dishes, and I also like Mediterranean food; additionally, I tend to prefer sweet desserts, such as pastries and ice cream.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence about childhood, then contrast with the present using a linking word (e.g., ‘however’). Be specific about foods and correct collocations (say ‘Korean soups’ not ‘Korean sauce’). Limit to 3–4 sentences and use past tense for childhood details.

範例: I can't recall a specific favorite from my childhood; however, as I grew older I developed a strong liking for soups. For instance, I enjoy Chinese herbal soups, Filipino sinigang, and Korean kimchi stew, and I also like sharing hot pots with friends.

建議: Organize the answer chronologically with clear linking phrases (e.g., ‘in the first quarter’, ‘then’, ‘in August’, ‘in December’). Use specific, accurate descriptions (capitalization: ‘Halo-halo’) and avoid vague phrases like ‘somewhere in the Philippines’. Keep to 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes. In the first quarter I often eat dim sum during Chinese New Year. Then in summer I enjoy Filipino treats like halo-halo when I visit the Philippines, and in August I eat more soups because it gets colder; by December I usually eat traditional Christmas dishes with my family.

建議: Answer directly with one clear topic sentence, then give a concise reason and a specific example. Correct tense and redundancy errors (use past tense: ‘I ate’, and avoid repeating phrases like ‘when I get older/when I got older’). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, my preferences changed. As a child I ate a lot of junk food, but now I prefer home-cooked meals because they are healthier and cheaper, for example I often cook vegetable soups and grilled fish at home.

× I describe myself as somewhat diverse and adventurous with any cuisine I try.

✓ I would describe myself as somewhat adventurous and open to any cuisine I try.

The original sentence uses present simple 'I describe myself' which sounds awkward here. Rephrasing to 'I would describe myself' or 'I describe myself as' with better adjective order and 'open to' clarifies meaning. Suggest using conditional 'would' for a personal description and 'open to' to express willingness to try cuisines.

× I can try Japanese, Korean, or any Asian food as well as those in Mediterranean places.

✓ I can try Japanese, Korean, or other Asian foods as well as Mediterranean dishes.

The sentence uses 'those in Mediterranean places' which is awkward and ungrammatical. Use 'other Asian foods' (plural) and 'Mediterranean dishes'. This corrects noun form and improves clarity.

× I like sweet food as well and it's my main.

✓ I also like sweet foods, and they are my favorites.

'It's my main' is unclear and uses singular 'it' for general preference. Use plural 'sweet foods' and 'they are my favorites' to refer to foods in general. This corrects agreement and clarity.

× I don't have a strong memory so I don't remember any food that I liked when I was young, but growing older, I find myself liking soups.

✓ I don't have a strong memory, so I don't remember any food I liked when I was young, but as I grew older I began to like soups.

Tense consistency: 'growing older, I find myself liking' mixes present and past. Use past 'as I grew older I began to like' to match 'when I was young' and indicate change over time.

× I tried different kinds of soups from different cuisines such as Chinese, Filipino or Korean sauce.

✓ I tried different kinds of soups from cuisines such as Chinese, Filipino, or Korean.

'Korean sauce' is incorrect in this context; likely meant 'Korean' soups. Remove 'sauce' and keep parallel structure 'Chinese, Filipino, or Korean.'

× I even try hot pots.

✓ I even tried hot pots.

Question asked past 'When you were young?' so use past tense 'tried' instead of present 'try' to maintain tense consistency.

× Yes, I try different kinds of food for the first quarter of the year, since its Chinese New Year, I like to try dim sum and then by the second quarter it's somewhere in the Philippines.

✓ Yes, I try different kinds of food in the first quarter of the year because it's Chinese New Year; I like to try dim sum, and in the second quarter I go somewhere in the Philippines.

Use 'in the first quarter' not 'for', and replace comma splice with a semicolon or separate sentences. 'since its' should be 'because it's' and 'by the second quarter it's somewhere in the Philippines' is unclear; rephrase to 'in the second quarter I go somewhere in the Philippines.'

× So I tried the Filipino dessert, which is the Halo Halo.

✓ So I tried a Filipino dessert called halo-halo.

Use 'a' for one of many desserts and lowercase 'halo-halo' as a dish name; use 'called' to introduce the name. Also remove unnecessary commas.

× And then by August it's quite cold so I eat a lot of soup and by December we celebrate the holiday.

✓ By August it gets quite cool so I eat a lot of soup, and in December we celebrate the holidays.

Use 'gets' or present habitual 'it gets' for seasonal tendency; 'cool' fits better than 'cold' depending on climate. Use 'holidays' plural and 'in December' for time expression.

× I would say yes. When I was younger I eat a lot of unhealthy foods which includes junk food and other snacks that are not healthy for my body and when I get older, when I got older I tried to eat dishes made at home which is healthier and much cheaper.

✓ I would say yes. When I was younger I ate a lot of unhealthy foods, including junk food and other snacks that were not healthy for my body, and as I got older I tried to eat dishes made at home that were healthier and much cheaper.

Multiple errors: tense inconsistency ('I was younger I eat' should be 'I ate'), subject-verb agreement ('which includes' -> 'including' or 'which included'), and repeated phrases 'when I get older, when I got older'—remove redundancy. Use past tense throughout to describe past habits and ensure agreement between plural 'foods' and past verbs.