食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence naming one or two favourite foods, correct unclear phrases (e.g. “bald species” is incorrect), and give one specific example with a brief reason. Keep within 2–4 sentences and use linking words like “for example” or “because.”

範例: My favourite foods are spicy traditional Chinese dishes and sweet desserts like ice cream. For example, I often eat Sichuan-style hotpot because I enjoy bold, numbing flavours that remind me of home.

建議: Good structure and content, but reduce redundancy and fix small grammatical errors. Use a clear topic sentence, add one linking word, and keep details concise and relevant. Avoid repeating the same idea twice.

範例: When I was young, I loved sweet foods such as cake and chocolate. For example, I always looked forward to birthdays because I could eat a large slice of cake, which made the day feel extra special.

建議: Answer is clear but avoid short fragmented sentences and small grammar errors. Start with a topic sentence, use linking words (e.g. “in summer” / “in winter”), and choose one or two specific seasonal foods with brief reasons. Keep it natural and concise.

範例: Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year. In summer I often eat cool treats like ice cream to stay refreshed, while in winter I prefer warm foods such as noodles or dumplings because they make me feel cosy.

建議: Good idea but improve grammar, tense consistency and clarity. Begin with a direct topic sentence, explain briefly why tastes changed using linking words (“because” / “so”), and provide a specific example of current food choices. Keep to 2–3 sentences and correct verb forms.

範例: Yes, my favourite foods have changed. As a child I loved sweets like ice cream, but now I avoid them because they are unhealthy, so I try to eat more vegetables and fruits to stay healthy.

× For example, I often eat traditional Chinese dishes with bald species because I like strong flavors and they remind me of home.

✓ For example, I often eat traditional Chinese dishes with bold spices because I like strong flavors and they remind me of home.

The student likely meant 'bold spices' not 'bald species'. 'Bald' is an adjective meaning lacking hair and 'species' is a noun meaning kinds of organisms; both are incorrect here. 'Bold' correctly describes strong flavors and 'spices' are the flavorful ingredients. Suggestion: check vocabulary and choose words that match meaning; read the sentence aloud to catch wrong words.

× I always looked forward to my birthday because I could eat a large piece of cake.

✓ I always looked forward to my birthday because I could eat a large slice of cake.

The main error is word choice: 'piece of cake' is acceptable but 'slice of cake' is more natural when referring to a serving. No tense issue. Suggestion: prefer 'slice' for servings of cake; ensure noun collocations are natural.

× Sometimes I would eat half of it and the sugar made me the day feel extra special.

✓ Sometimes I would eat half of it and the sugar would make the day feel extra special.

The original has wrong word order 'made me the day feel' and mixes tenses. The corrected version uses 'would make' to match the habitual past context. Suggestion: keep consistent tense for habitual actions in the past and ensure correct word order: subject + verb + object.

× When it is summer I usually eat some cool food like the ice cream, but in winter I prefer eating noodles or the dumplings because it lets me feel warm.

✓ In summer I usually eat cool foods like ice cream, but in winter I prefer eating noodles or dumplings because they make me feel warm.

Errors: unnecessary definite articles ('the ice cream', 'the dumplings') and singular/plural mismatch. 'When it is summer' is unnatural; 'In summer' is preferred. 'Cool food' pluralized to 'cool foods' or uncountable 'ice cream'. Pronoun 'it' mismatched — refer to 'noodles or dumplings' so use 'they' and 'make' not 'lets'. Suggestion: use correct articles (no article for general uncountable nouns), match subject and verb number, and prefer natural seasonal expressions.

× But when I grow up I thought that it was not very healthy so I will kept control on it and sometimes eat some vegetables and fruits to keep my figure.

✓ But when I grew up I thought that it was not very healthy, so I tried to control it and sometimes ate vegetables and fruit to keep my figure.

Multiple tense and verb form errors. 'When I grow up' should be past 'when I grew up' to match 'I thought'. 'Will kept' mixes future 'will' with past 'kept' — correct is past 'tried to control' or 'kept it under control'. Use 'ate' or 'started eating' for past habitual. 'Fruits' can be 'fruit' (uncountable) or 'fruits' is acceptable but 'fruit' is more common. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense when talking about past changes; use correct verb forms (try/tryed->tried) and natural collocations ('control it', 'eat vegetables and fruit').

× it lets me feel warm.

✓ they make me feel warm.

Original uses 'it' and 'lets' referring to plural nouns 'noodles or dumplings'. Subject-verb agreement requires plural 'they make', not singular 'it lets'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun number matches the noun phrase and use correct verb form for plural subjects.