食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid fillers (uh, like). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Vary vocabulary (e.g., ‘nostalgic’, ‘tradition’) and keep to 2–3 sentences to be natural and effective.

範例: My favourite food is dumplings. They make me feel nostalgic because my parents used to make them when I was a child, and making dumplings was a family tradition that brought us together.

建議: Remove repetition and fillers, and organise into a clear topic sentence plus a brief reason and a note about change. Use linking words like ‘because’ and ‘however’ to show contrast when saying it changed.

範例: When I was young I loved sweet foods, especially chocolates and candies, because I spent most of my pocket money on them. However, my tastes have changed as I now prefer savoury or homemade meals.

建議: Be more precise and correct grammar (e.g., subject–verb agreement). Use one linking phrase to explain reason and give one specific example of easy dishes. Avoid filler words and duplicate words.

範例: Not really — I tend to eat the same foods all year because I don’t have much time to cook or try new recipes. For example, my family often makes quick meals like stir-fries or pasta dishes that save time.

建議: This answer is clear and contains examples, but could be improved by explicitly answering whether the favourite food changed and by adding a brief contrast to childhood. Use a linking word like ‘however’ or ‘although’ to show change.

範例: My favourite food has changed somewhat. Although I loved sweets as a child, now I prefer quick, savoury meals because I’m busy; for example, my family often cooks stir-fries or pasta since they are quick and require few ingredients.

× First of all, it reminds me about my, uh, my background because when I was a child my parents used to make it and that also like a very good way for the family to spend time together while making the dumplings.

✓ First of all, it reminds me of my background because when I was a child my parents used to make them, and that was also a very good way for the family to spend time together while making the dumplings.

Use 'remind of' rather than 'remind about' when referring to something that evokes a memory. 'Dumplings' is plural, so use the pronoun 'them' instead of 'it'. Also match tense and structure: 'that was also a very good way' is clearer and agrees with the past context. Replace the conversational filler and extra commas for smoother flow.

× When I was young, I used to like sweet food, any types of chocolate and sweets and candies and every, uh, single penny that I was saving from my pocket money I was spending on, on sweet food, which has changed over the time.

✓ When I was young, I used to like sweet foods: all types of chocolate, sweets and candies, and every single penny I saved from my pocket money I spent on sweet food, which has changed over time.

Use 'sweet foods' (plural) to match 'types'. 'Any types' is incorrect; use 'all types'. Remove filler and duplicate words. Use simple past 'saved' and 'spent' to match 'used to'. 'Over the time' should be 'over time'.

× Now, uh, over the year I eat the same food, I don't really have much time for cooking and, uh, looking up for new recipes.

✓ Now, over the year I eat the same foods; I don't really have much time for cooking or looking up new recipes.

Use 'foods' plural to indicate variety of meals. Use 'or' not 'and' when contrasting 'don't have time for A or B'. 'Looking up for' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'look up' with no 'for' after it when followed by an object. Remove filler words and use a semicolon or separate sentences for clarity.

× That's why our family stick to the recipes, which are very easy to make and and are time saving.

✓ That's why our family sticks to recipes that are very easy to make and are time-saving.

'Family' as a collective noun here takes singular verb 'sticks'. Remove duplicate 'and'. Use 'recipes' without 'the' for general reference, and hyphenate 'time-saving' as a compound adjective. Also streamline relative clause: 'that' is more natural for defining clauses.

× Now, I tend to eat the same kinds of food throughout the year because I don't have much time to cook or try new recipes.

✓ Now, I tend to eat the same kinds of food throughout the year because I don't have much time to cook or to try new recipes.

The original is mostly correct; add parallel 'to' before the second infinitive for clearer parallel structure: 'to cook or to try'. This maintains present tense and intention.

× My family prefers quick, easy dishes.

✓ My family prefers quick, easy dishes.

Sentence is correct; no quantifier error. Included here to show no change needed.

× For example, we often make stir fries or pasta because they are fast to prepare and require a few ingredients.

✓ For example, we often make stir-fries or pasta because they are quick to prepare and require only a few ingredients.

Use hyphen 'stir-fries' as common form. Prefer 'quick' rather than 'fast' for preparation. Add 'only' to clarify 'a few ingredients'. The structure is correct; this adjusts word choice and compound noun formatting.