食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, umm), correct grammar (e.g., “it makes me feel”), and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Keep to under five sentences.

範例: My favourite food is fast food because it is convenient for me as a busy student. For example, when I have little time between classes I can quickly buy a burger or fries. However, I try not to eat it too often because I know it is less healthy.

建議: Open with a clear topic sentence naming the food, then give specific, coherent supporting details. Avoid vague or incorrect phrases (e.g., “share a move and laugh” unclear; use “share meals and memories”), check grammar and verb forms.

範例: When I was young I loved spaghetti. I especially enjoyed it with tomato sauce and minced meat, and my family often ate it together, which created happy memories. Those shared dinners still make me nostalgic today.

建議: Give a direct answer then specific seasonal examples. Avoid vague statements about ‘growing up’ and reduce fillers. Use linking words (for example, in summer/for festivals) and correct grammar (e.g., “I’ve grown up”).

範例: Yes, I do. For example, in summer I eat lighter meals like salads and cold noodles, while in winter I prefer soups and stews to keep warm. I also change my diet during holidays to include traditional dishes.

建議: Answer directly and give clear reasons and specific changes. Avoid awkward phrasing (“a little bit of fat”) — say “high in fat/sugar.” Mention what you now prefer and link cause and effect with connectors (because, so).

範例: Yes, it has. As a child I loved sweets and snacks because they were tasty and easy to get. Now I try to eat healthier foods, such as more vegetables and home-cooked meals, because I want to maintain my health.

× Well, I think my favorite food is fast food because it's convenient for me as a senior student, uh, which I can umm, choose every time when I have no reason or nothing to eat and have no idea.

✓ Well, I think my favorite food is fast food because it's convenient for me as a senior student, and I can choose it whenever I have nothing to eat or no ideas about what to eat.

The original sentence misuses the relative pronoun 'which' to introduce a clause about the ability to choose; a coordinating conjunction 'and' is appropriate. Also 'choose every time when I have no reason or nothing to eat and have no idea' is ungrammatical and confusing; replace with 'choose it whenever I have nothing to eat or no ideas about what to eat.' This keeps tense and meaning consistent and uses correct pronoun reference ('it' refers to 'fast food'). Suggestion: break long clauses into simpler parts and ensure pronouns clearly refer to their antecedents.

× Moreover, it's make me feel really convenient.

✓ Moreover, it makes me feel very comfortable.

This contains a third person singular verb error and incorrect word choice. 'It's make' is incorrect: after subject 'it' we need the third person singular present 'makes'. 'Convenient' describes situations, not feelings; 'comfortable' is appropriate for feelings. Suggestion: Use correct verb conjugation for third person singular and choose adjectives that match the intended meaning.

× Well, when I was young I liked spaghetti, a type of noodles.

✓ Well, when I was young I liked spaghetti, a type of noodle.

'Spaghetti' is an uncountable noun referring to a type of pasta; saying 'a type of noodles' is incorrect because 'noodles' is plural and 'a type of' should be followed by a singular noun: 'noodle' or better 'pasta'. Suggestion: say 'a type of pasta' or 'a kind of noodle' to be grammatically correct.

× It's really delicious with a meat and the potato is really good for our health and my family like it too, so we can share a move and laugh.

✓ It's really delicious with meat, and potatoes are good for our health. My family likes it too, so we can share a meal and laugh.

Multiple article and agreement errors: 'a meat' is incorrect because 'meat' is uncountable here; use no article. 'The potato' is unnatural in this general statement; use plural 'potatoes' with no definite article or say 'potatoes are'. 'My family like' should be 'My family likes' because 'family' as a collective noun takes singular verb in this variety of English. 'Share a move' is a wrong collocation; correct is 'share a meal.' Suggestion: use correct articles with countable/uncountable nouns, match verb number with collective nouns, and use appropriate collocations.

× It make me feel memorized.

✓ It makes me feel nostalgic.

'It make' is incorrect for third person singular; should be 'it makes'. 'Memorized' is the wrong word choice: 'memorized' means committed to memory, not an emotion. 'Nostalgic' conveys a feeling of sentimental remembrance. Suggestion: use correct verb conjugation and choose adjectives that express intended emotions.

× For sure, because, uh, I'm grow up and I need to change my food to suitable for me, uh, about the work, about the house, about parents and everything that it could be convenient for me and for other people.

✓ For sure, because I'm growing up and I need to change my diet to be suitable for me, for work, for the household, for my parents, and for everything that could be convenient for me and other people.

'I'm grow up' is incorrect; progressive form 'I'm growing up' is needed. 'Change my food to suitable for me' is ungrammatical; use 'change my diet to be suitable for me.' 'About the work, about the house, about parents' should be parallel prepositional phrases 'for work, for the household, for my parents.' Remove redundant 'it' in 'that it could be.' Suggestion: use correct progressive forms, appropriate nouns ('diet' vs 'food'), and maintain parallel structure.

× So it changed a lot.

✓ So it has changed a lot.

Context refers to changes over time continuing to the present; present perfect 'has changed' is more appropriate than simple past 'changed.' This conveys that the change is relevant now. Suggestion: use present perfect when past actions have present relevance.

× Absolutely yes, because when I was a child I really liked the sweet food like candy or chips or snack to eat in my whole time.

✓ Absolutely. When I was a child I really liked sweets like candy, chips, or snacks and ate them all the time.

Multiple errors: 'the sweet food' should be 'sweets' (general category, no definite article). 'Or snack' should be plural 'snacks.' 'To eat in my whole time' is ungrammatical; correct phrase is 'ate them all the time.' Also split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use plural forms for general categories and standard idioms like 'all the time.'

× But it's a little bit of fat so I change it to be more healthier, like it more vegetable and do a routine.

✓ But they are a bit fatty, so I changed my diet to be healthier, eating more vegetables and following a routine.

Problems: 'it's a little bit of fat' is awkward; refer to 'they are a bit fatty' or 'they are high in fat.' 'I change it to be more healthier' has double comparative error ('more healthier'); use 'healthier' and past tense 'changed' to match context. 'Like it more vegetable' is ungrammatical; use 'eating more vegetables.' 'Do a routine' should be 'following a routine.' Suggestion: use correct comparative forms (not 'more healthier'), ensure verb tense consistency, and use natural collocations like 'eat more vegetables' and 'follow a routine.'