食物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one brief reason or detail using a linking word. Limit to 1–3 sentences.

範例: My favourite food is pizza because I love the chewy crust and variety of toppings. For example, I usually choose a Margherita or pepperoni pizza when I eat out.

建議: Use correct tense and grammar, remove fillers, and structure the answer: topic sentence + brief reason. Use linking words (but, because) correctly and be specific about what changed.

範例: When I was younger I preferred fast food and ate it almost every other day. However, as I got older I started choosing homemade meals because they are healthier and help me maintain a balanced diet.

建議: Be more fluent and specific; avoid hesitation. Give a clear topic sentence, then one specific example with concise details and a linking word. Correct vocabulary (e.g., 'Norooz' and specific dish name).

範例: Yes. We have traditional foods for special occasions. For example, during Norooz, our New Year in spring, families usually prepare a rice dish with vegetables called sabzi polo to celebrate together.

建議: Avoid hesitations and fragmented sentences. Give a direct answer (yes/no), then briefly explain how and why, using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Be grammatical and specific.

範例: Yes, my tastes have changed. I used to eat a lot of fast food, but now I prefer homemade dishes because they are healthier and help me keep a balanced diet.

× I really enjoy eating pizza since I remember pizza was my favorite food.

✓ I have really enjoyed eating pizza for as long as I can remember; pizza was my favorite food.

The original mixes simple present 'I really enjoy' with 'since I remember' which is unnatural. Use present perfect 'have enjoyed' with 'for as long as I can remember' to show a state continuing from the past to present. Also combine clauses for clarity.

× When I was younger I really prefer to have a fast food every other day, but as I got older I prefer to have a homemade cook and because, uh, they are more healthier and it's better to have a balance between.

✓ When I was younger I really preferred to have fast food every other day, but as I got older I preferred homemade cooking because it is healthier and it is better to have a balanced diet.

Tense inconsistency: reference to the past ('When I was younger') requires past tense 'preferred' not present 'prefer'. 'A fast food' is incorrect: 'fast food' is uncountable so no article. 'Homemade cook' is incorrect noun choice; use 'homemade cooking' or 'home-cooked food'. 'They are more healthier' doubles comparatives and wrong pronoun; use 'it is healthier'. 'Balance between' is incomplete; use 'balanced diet' for clarity.

× Uh, we do have some traditional food in my culture that we are just, uh, making for a special event. Uh, for example, for the Norooz, it's the day of, uh, it's the first day of the spring. It's our new year and everybody is going to make, uh, rice with vegetable and beside.

✓ We have some traditional foods in my culture that we make for special events. For example, Norooz is the first day of spring; it's our new year and everybody makes rice with vegetables and other dishes.

Preposition and plurality issues: 'in my culture that we are just...making' is wordy; simplify to 'that we make'. 'For the Norooz' -> 'Norooz' without 'the'. 'The first day of the spring' -> 'the first day of spring'. 'Rice with vegetable' needs plural 'vegetables'. 'And beside' is incorrect; use 'and other dishes' or 'and sides'.

× Uh, to be honest, my taste, uh, got matured and during these years and I could have a better balance in my diet, uh, because I used to eat fast food a lot, but now I uh, prefer to have a homemade, umm, dishes.

✓ To be honest, my taste has matured over the years and I have achieved a better balance in my diet because I used to eat fast food a lot, but now I prefer home-cooked dishes.

Tense and verb form errors: 'got matured' is incorrect; use present perfect 'has matured' to show change over time. 'During these years' -> 'over the years'. 'I could have a better balance' is awkward; 'I have achieved a better balance' fits. 'A homemade, umm, dishes' mixes article with plural; use 'home-cooked dishes' (no 'a').