建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is short, contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases (e.g. "gives me fees and questions"). Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, correcting grammar, and adding one or two specific details using a linking word. Keep it under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing buildings because their shapes and details are interesting, and they help me practice composition. For example, I often take pictures of older houses to capture their ornate windows and textured walls. In addition, photography encourages me to look more carefully at my surroundings.

建議: Your answer is understandable but has awkward phrasing and repetition (e.g. "named by me", "strong history back"). Provide a clear topic sentence naming the building, then give specific reasons and one supporting detail, using linking words to improve coherence.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the Old City Museum, which is a historic building in my town. The architecture is beautiful, with carved stone facades and large arched windows, so I want to see those details up close. Moreover, my friends told me it played an important role in local history, so I would like to learn about its past and view the exhibits inside.

× Yes, I like to take a photo of building which gives me fees and questions.

✓ Yes, I like to take photos of buildings because they give me ideas and questions.

Errors: 'a photo of building' is missing an article and uses singular where plural is natural; 'gives me fees and questions' likely misused word 'fees' and wrong verb agreement. Correction uses plural 'photos of buildings' to match the general habit (present simple), changes 'gives' to 'give' to agree with plural subject, and replaces 'fees' with 'ideas' which fits the intended meaning. Suggestion: use plural for general habits (I like to take photos of buildings) and ensure noun choice matches intended meaning; check subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, there is a building named by me which is historical and the architecture is very good.

✓ Yes, there is a building I named that is historic and has very good architecture.

Errors: 'named by me' is an awkward passive; 'which is historical' is correct but 'historic' is more natural; 'the architecture is very good' is acceptable but rephrased for clarity. Correction uses active reduced relative clause 'a building I named', uses adjective 'historic', and changes verb structure to 'has very good architecture'. Suggestion: prefer active constructions and natural adjective choices; reduce wordiness in relative clauses.

× I have heard from my friends and it has a strong history back.

✓ I heard about it from my friends, and it has a long history.

Errors: 'I have heard from my friends' is acceptable but 'heard about it from my friends' is clearer; 'it has a strong history back' is ungrammatical—'strong history back' is incorrect collocation. Correction uses simple past 'I heard about it' (fits conversational past reference) and 'has a long history' which is idiomatic. Suggestion: use 'heard about' when someone tells you information about something; use collocations like 'long history' or 'a rich history'.

× I want to learn about that too.

✓ I would like to learn more about it too.

Errors: 'I want to learn about that too' is understandable but slightly informal and less natural in this context. Correction uses 'I would like to learn more about it too' to match polite intent and ties to previous sentence. Suggestion: use 'would like' for polite statements and 'learn more about it' to indicate interest in additional information.