建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and repetitions, use correct grammar (singular/plural, tense), and add a specific supporting detail with a linking phrase. Keep it under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I often photograph tall buildings, especially skyscrapers. For example, when I visited Dubai last year I took many photos of the skyline and saved them in my gallery. I enjoy capturing the unique shapes and lighting because they look impressive in photos.

建議: Give a direct answer, correct grammar (use present/future appropriately), remove filler words, and add a reason with a linking word. Be specific about what attracts you to that building.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the One World Trade Center. I plan to go because it is a very tall and impressive skyscraper, and I want to see the observation deck for the panoramic views of the city.

× I like to take a snap of a, of a higher buildings or a skyscraper.

✓ I like to take snaps of tall buildings or of a skyscraper.

The student mixes singular and plural ('a snap' with 'buildings') and uses the incorrect article 'a' before the plural noun. Use plural 'snaps' when referring to photos in general and say 'tall buildings' instead of 'higher buildings'. Also 'tall' is the more natural adjective for buildings than 'higher' in this context. Suggestion: decide singular or plural and match articles and nouns (e.g., 'a snap of a skyscraper' or 'snaps of tall buildings').

× A skyscraper, umm, for example, when I win, I go when I went to Dubai, uh, I take a lot of uh, snaps and save it to my gallery for a skyscrapers.

✓ For example, when I went to Dubai, I took a lot of snaps of skyscrapers and saved them to my gallery.

The student uses mixed tenses ('win', 'go', 'went', 'take', 'save') and incorrect article usage ('a skyscrapers'). The sentence refers to a past trip so all main verbs should be in the past tense: 'went', 'took', 'saved'. Use plural 'skyscrapers' without 'a' and refer to 'them' to match the plural object. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and match pronouns to plural nouns.

× I think, uh, World Trade Center is the most, uh, interested building I need to visit or I planning, I plan, I planning to visit because it's a massive, uh, and huge skyscraper, umm.

✓ I think the World Trade Center is the most interesting building I need to visit, and I am planning to visit it because it's a massive and huge skyscraper.

Several issues: missing definite article 'the' before 'World Trade Center', incorrect adjective form 'interested' should be 'interesting' to describe the building, and incorrect verb forms 'I planning' need the auxiliary 'am' for present continuous: 'I am planning'. Also add object pronoun 'it' after 'visit' to clarify. 'Massive and huge' is redundant; choose one or keep both for emphasis. Suggestion: use 'the' with specific buildings, use '-ing' adjectives correctly ('interesting'), and form continuous tenses with appropriate auxiliary verbs ('I am planning').