建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid irrelevant or unclear phrasing (e.g. ‘superis’). Correct tense and article errors and reduce redundancy.

範例: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I'm a bit afraid of heights. However, I do enjoy taking pictures when I travel to scenic places, for example, I often photograph mountain views and seashores because their colours and shapes are very striking.

建議: Open with a clear statement naming the building, then give specific reasons with coherent linking words. Fix grammar (articles, verb forms) and use precise vocabulary instead of vague phrases like ‘superis’. Provide one clear supporting example or reason in two sentences total.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the Louvre in Paris because it houses many artworks that reflect French history and culture. For example, a friend who visited said the museum explains local customs and traditions through paintings and exhibits, which would help me understand French society better.

× Honestly, no, I'm little scared of heights and generally I don't prefer to stay in very tall buildings.

✓ Honestly, no, I'm a little scared of heights and generally I don't prefer to stay in very tall buildings.

Missing the article 'a' before 'little' when describing a state. Use 'a little scared' or better 'a little scared of' to form a correct adjective phrase. Suggestion: include the article 'a' for countable/measure adjectives (I'm a little scared).

× However I'm quite fond of taking photographs when I went to some travelling such as in mountains or in seashore area which are quite alluring to.

✓ However I'm quite fond of taking photographs when I travel to places such as the mountains or the seashore, which are quite alluring.

The original mixes past tense 'went' with a general habit; use present simple 'travel' for habitual actions. Also 'some travelling' is unidiomatic; use 'travel to places'. Add definite articles 'the mountains' and 'the seashore'. Remove trailing preposition 'to' and place the relative clause correctly. Suggestion: use present simple for habits and correct article use for geographic features.

× I would love to visit the Louvre museum that is in Paris showing and exploring the culture of the city.

✓ I would love to visit the Louvre in Paris to see and explore the culture of the city.

'The Louvre museum' is redundant; commonly 'the Louvre' is used. The clause 'that is in Paris showing and exploring' is ungrammatical—use an infinitive purpose phrase 'to see and explore'. Also 'the Louvre' requires definite article. Suggestion: use set expression 'the Louvre' and an infinitive to express purpose.

× For instance, my friend went there and she told me it shows the customs and the traditions of superis.

✓ For instance, my friend went there and she told me it shows the customs and traditions of the city.

The noun 'superis' is unrecognizable; likely intended 'Paris' or 'the city'. Use 'the city' for clarity. Keep present tense 'shows' since the museum currently displays customs and traditions. Remove the definite article before 'traditions' when speaking generally. Suggestion: replace unknown word with correct noun and keep present tense for general facts.

× Also helps people to understand how the French people.

✓ It also helps people understand how French people live and behave.

Sentence lacks a subject ('It') and a complete verb phrase. 'How the French people' is incomplete — add a verb or noun phrase (e.g., 'live and behave'). Remove unnecessary definite article before national adjective when used attributively ('French people' not 'the French people' in this context). Suggestion: include a subject and complete the idea by adding verbs describing what is understood.