建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, grammatical and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one brief reason with a linking word. Fix grammar (e.g., avoid extra words and correct verb forms). Use natural expressions such as “I don’t really” or “I’m not into photography.”

範例: No, I don’t usually take photos of buildings because I’m not really into photography. However, if a building has interesting architecture or history, I might take a quick picture to remember it.

建議: Provide a clear, specific answer with coherent supporting details and correct grammar. Start with a topic sentence naming the building, then explain why using linking words (because/so/for example). Be specific about reasons — e.g., architecture, history, facilities — and avoid unclear phrases like “there's an my dream.”

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the Shangri-La building in my hometown because it has always been my dream destination. For example, it offers a luxury gym and swimming pool, and I’m curious to see its modern design and amenities in person.

× Not really because I'm actually not enjoying and taking a photos.

✓ Not really, because I don't really enjoy taking photos.

Original uses 'I'm actually not enjoying and taking a photos' which mixes continuous form with two verbs and an incorrect article. The activity 'enjoy' is typically used in simple present for habits: 'I don't enjoy' (Present tense issue, type 6). 'Enjoy' should be followed by a gerund, so use 'enjoy taking'. Also 'a photos' is wrong: 'photos' is plural so no 'a' (Singular and plural issue, type 1). Suggestion: use simple present negative 'I don't really enjoy taking photos.'

× Like I'm just not a photography person.

✓ I'm just not a photography person.

Starting with 'Like' is conversational but unnecessary in a formal answer (Sentence structure issue, type 26). The phrase 'a photography person' is awkward; 'a photography person' is acceptable colloquially but better as 'a photographic person' or more naturally 'a photography person' is okay; primary issue is redundancy of 'Like'. Suggestion: remove 'Like' and say 'I'm just not a photography person.'

× So no, I would like to say no.

✓ So no, I would say no.

Repeating 'no' and using 'I would like to say no' is wordy and slightly odd for a direct response. 'I would say no' is more natural. The problem is sentence structure and word choice (type 26 and incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs type 13). Suggestion: use concise phrasing: 'So no, I would say no.'

× Yeah, I would like to say my hometown countries Shangri-La building because there's an my dream.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the Shangri-La building in my hometown because it's my dream to go there.

Original has multiple errors: 'hometown countries' is incorrect (plural/singular issue, type 1) and 'an my dream' combines wrong article with pronoun (article errors, type 22). Also 'I would like to say' is unnatural for wanting to visit (sentence structure, type 26). Use 'visit' for the action and 'the Shangri-La building in my hometown' to clarify. Replace 'there's an my dream' with 'it's my dream to go there.' Suggestion: 'I would like to visit the Shangri-La building in my hometown because it's my dream to go there.'

× So I would like to go there because of goes to gym and swimming.

✓ I would like to go there because I can go to the gym and swim.

Original 'because of goes to gym and swimming' is ungrammatical: 'because of' requires a noun phrase, and 'goes' is third person singular but subject is missing (verb form error, type 2/6). Also 'swimming' as a noun could work but sentence lacks parallel structure. Better: 'because I can go to the gym and swim' or 'because there are gym and swimming facilities.' This fixes verb tense/person and preposition use (incorrect use of prepositions, type 11). Suggestion: use a full clause after 'because' and keep parallel verbs: 'I can go to the gym and swim.'