建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, grammatically correct and directly answer the question. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repetition and fix word order and articles.

範例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home because I live in the countryside. For example, the nearest town only has two- or three-storey houses, so the skyline is mostly low and open.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and then one or two specific details linked logically. Use correct verb tenses and clearer phrasing for habits and platforms. Keep it under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of interesting buildings when I go out. For instance, I usually photograph facades and details with my family and then share the best shots on Instagram or WhatsApp so my friends can see them.

建議: Answer directly and clearly, correct grammar and reduce repetition. Mention the building name/location, give one reason why you want to visit, and provide a specific recent example using past tense correctly.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the Alante Mall in Chandigarh because it has modern architecture and many shops. In fact, I went there last weekend with friends and we took lots of photos of the mall’s interior and exterior.

× Actually no, because I live in the countryside area so there is a no tall buildings in nearest near to my home so there is not our building.

✓ Actually no. I live in the countryside, so there are no tall buildings near my home.

Multiple issues: sentence run-on, incorrect article and noun number, wrong word order, and incorrect negation. 'No tall buildings' requires plural noun and 'there are' for existence (subject-verb agreement). 'Nearest near to my home' is redundant and incorrect; use 'near my home'. Split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use shorter sentences, ensure subject-verb agreement ('there are'), and correct prepositional phrase 'near my home'.

× Yes, whenever I go outside my friends open my sometimes with my family members I take photos and I just shared on my personal Instagrams or WhatsApp handles so I like it to share with my friends as well.

✓ Yes. Whenever I go out with my friends or family, I sometimes take photos and share them on my Instagram or WhatsApp, and I like sharing them with my friends.

Problems: unclear pronoun references, word order, tense inconsistency, and pluralization of platform names. 'Go outside' should be 'go out'; 'open my sometimes' is meaningless. Use 'I sometimes take photos' (adverb placement) and 'share them' (correct object pronoun). Use singular 'Instagram' and 'WhatsApp' and present tense 'share' to match habitual action. Break into clearer clauses.

× Yes, there is a building near to my home is in in Chandigarh as a specialist Atlante Mall.

✓ Yes, there is a building near my home in Chandigarh called Atlantis Mall.

Errors: redundant 'near to' (use 'near'), repeated 'in in', incorrect adjective 'specialist', and wrong mall name spelling/structure. Use 'in Chandigarh' to indicate location and 'called Atlantis Mall' to name the building. Keep prepositions concise: 'near my home' and 'in Chandigarh'.

× So I like to visit there and whenever I was there I clicked a picture with my friends or family members and the last on the last weekend when I was there I created a lot of pictures.

✓ I like to visit there. Whenever I go, I take pictures with my friends or family. Last weekend when I was there, I took a lot of pictures.

Mixed tense and incorrect verb choices: 'whenever I was there I clicked a picture' mixes past with habitual meaning; use present for habitual ('I go'/'I take') and past for specific events ('Last weekend... I took a lot of pictures'). 'Clicked' is informal; 'took' is appropriate. 'Created a lot of pictures' is unnatural—use 'took a lot of pictures'. Split into sentences for clarity and correct tense consistency.