建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and avoid repetition or fragments. Start with a clear topic sentence, use one or two linked supporting details, and correct word choice and grammar errors (e.g., remove duplicated words, combine fragments). Aim for 2–4 sentences, use linking words like 'and' or 'so', and provide one specific example or observation.

範例: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home, including high-rise apartment blocks and an office tower next to the shopping mall. From my window I can see three skyscrapers, which makes the area feel lively and modern.

建議: Clarify vocabulary and avoid incorrect or invented words. Give one reason and one brief example, linking them with words like 'because' or 'so'. Keep sentences grammatically correct and natural—replace vague phrases with concrete actions (e.g., 'I enjoy photographing' not 'I love captivism').

範例: Yes, I often photograph buildings when I travel because I enjoy both modern architecture and historic structures. For example, I took photos of a Baroque church last year and later shared the best shots on Instagram to remember the trip.

建議: Provide a clear, specific name and two coherent reasons using proper vocabulary. Avoid fillers like 'uh' and ambiguous words like 'ironic' or incomplete phrases. Combine short fragments into full sentences and use linking phrases (e.g., 'first,' 'also') to structure your answer.

範例: I would like to visit the Great World once. First, it is a famous landmark with impressive architecture, and second, it has appeared in many films and photographs, which makes me curious to see it in person.

× Yes, there are quite a few tall buildings close to where I live, and the neighborhood has a lot of high rise apartments, office office towers and the shopping mall.

✓ Yes, there are quite a few tall buildings close to where I live, and the neighborhood has a lot of high-rise apartments, office towers and a shopping mall.

Use of the definite article 'the' before 'shopping mall' implies a specific mall already known; 'a shopping mall' fits general reference. Also 'high rise' should be hyphenated as 'high-rise' when used as a compound adjective. Remove duplicated word 'office'.

× In the skyscraper.

✓ There are also skyscrapers nearby.

The fragment 'In the skyscraper.' is not a complete sentence (no subject or verb). Rewriting as a full sentence provides subject and verb and fits context.

× I find the both modern architecture and the old historical buildings fascinating.

✓ I find both modern architecture and the old historical buildings fascinating.

The phrase 'the both' is incorrect; 'both' should be used without 'the' when referring to two general items. Removing 'the' corrects pronoun/determiner usage.

× I love captivism on camera and share it on the social media.

✓ I love capturing them on camera and sharing them on social media.

'Captivism' is not a correct verb; use 'capturing'. Also use gerunds 'capturing' and 'sharing' to parallel actions. Use 'them' to refer back to buildings. 'Social media' does not need 'the' in general reference.

× It's a good way to remember it.

✓ It's a good way to remember them.

Pronoun 'it' mismatches plural antecedent 'buildings/photos'; use 'them' to agree in number. Tense is fine; this is a pronoun number agreement issue handled as present tense sentence.

× I would like to visit the great world one day.

✓ I would like to visit the Great World one day.

Sentence likely refers to a specific place named 'Great World' so capitalizing as a proper noun is correct. Also ensure full name is used; structure is otherwise fine.

× There are a couple of reasons.

✓ There are a couple of reasons why I want to visit.

The original sentence is short but acceptable; adding 'why I want to visit' clarifies and completes the idea to connect to following sentences.

× For one thing, it's such an ironic landmark and I think it's amazing to say it in your own uh.

✓ For one thing, it's such an iconic landmark, and I think it's amazing to say you've visited it yourself.

'Ironic' is likely the wrong adjective; 'iconic' fits meaning. The phrase 'to say it in your own uh' is ungrammatical and unclear; replace with a clear clause 'to say you've visited it yourself.' This corrects sentence structure and clarity.

× For another thing, it's a magnificent and has appeared in so many films and photos.

✓ For another thing, it's magnificent and has appeared in so many films and photos.

'A magnificent' is incorrect because 'magnificent' is an adjective and needs a noun if preceded by 'a' (e.g., 'a magnificent building'). Removing 'a' fixes adjective usage and yields a grammatically correct predicate adjective.