建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear, accurate and natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid incorrect words (e.g. “top” for tall, “flowers” and “miles” for floors/meters), and give a concise specific detail. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use a linking phrase if adding an example.

範例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, a large shopping mall close by is about 20 floors high, so it stands out in the skyline.

建議: Be fluent and concise. Give a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and repetition, then briefly explain the reason with a linking word (e.g. “because” or “so”). One or two supporting details are enough.

範例: No, I rarely take photos of buildings because I’m not very interested in photography and I usually don’t have time during my free moments.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and add specific, accurate details with correct grammar. Use linking words to expand (e.g. “because”/“which has”). Correct verb forms and articles are important. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and mention why you want to visit.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit a new museum that the local government recently built in the suburbs of my hometown, Tianjin, because it hosts a large exhibition of regional history and art.

× Sure, there are a lot of top buildings near my home.

✓ Sure, there are a lot of tall buildings near my home.

The speaker used 'top' where 'tall' is appropriate to describe building height. This is an adjective choice error. Use 'tall' to describe height; 'top' refers to position rather than size.

× For example, there is a big shopping mall near my home and it is almost 20 flowers and almost I think 30 miles tall.

✓ For example, there is a big shopping mall near my home and it is almost 20 floors high and maybe I think 30 meters tall.

Multiple issues: 'flowers' is a misspelling of 'floors' (countable noun for building levels) and 'miles' is an unlikely unit for building height; 'floors high' is the correct expression, and 'meters' or 'feet' are appropriate units. Also rephrase 'almost I think' to 'maybe I think' or 'maybe' for clarity.

× So it is very tall.

✓ So it is very tall.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It correctly uses third person singular 'it is'. No change needed beyond keeping punctuation and context.

× Actually, I must admit I never take photos of buildings.

✓ Actually, I must admit I never take photos of buildings.

This sentence is acceptable: 'must admit' expresses a strong admission and 'never take photos' uses present simple to indicate habitual action. No grammatical correction required.

× This might be because I'm not a big fan of, uh, take photos, taking photos, and uh, I'm too busy to take photos in leisure time.

✓ This might be because I'm not a big fan of taking photos, and I'm too busy to take photos in my leisure time.

After 'a big fan of' the verb should be in -ing form: 'taking photos'. Also 'in leisure time' is unnatural; use 'in my leisure time' or 'in my free time'. Remove filler repetitions for clarity.

× I prefer to, uh.

✓ I prefer not to.

The original is an incomplete sentence (sentence structure error) because it trailing off leaves the verb phrase unfinished. Provide a complete clause such as 'I prefer not to' or 'I prefer other subjects' to complete the thought.

× Actually it is a new museum build by my government, located in the suburb of my hometown Tianjin and it have a big exhibition.

✓ Actually, it is a new museum built by my government, located in the suburbs of my hometown Tianjin, and it has a big exhibition.

Use the past participle 'built' after passive construction (built by). 'Suburb' should be pluralized to 'suburbs' or 'the suburb' with an article; here 'suburbs' is natural. 'It have' is a subject-verb agreement error; third person singular requires 'it has'. Commas improve sentence clarity.