建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and detailed, but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Start with a concise topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Try to avoid phrasing like "the ones that have already been constructed" which is wordy; use simpler expressions.

範例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. For example, most completed towers are office blocks and commercial centers, while a few nearby sites are currently under construction.

建議: Good enthusiasm and relevant content but repetitive phrasing (

範例: ) and sentence length reduce clarity. Give a direct topic sentence then one or two concise reasons with linking words (e.g., "because" or "for example"). Avoid repeating 'love taking' twice in one answer and keep sentences shorter than five if possible.) Note: keep within five sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g., 'photograph' instead of repeating 'take photos').)

× Yes, I love to take photos of buildings, specifically when I travel to a new place and if the environment and the infrastructure of the building is completely new to me, I love taking the pictures of that place.

✓ Yes, I love taking photos of buildings, especially when I travel to a new place and the environment and the building's infrastructure are completely new to me; I enjoy photographing such places.

The original sentence mixes infinitive 'to take' and '-ing' forms inconsistently and is wordy. Use the gerund 'taking' after 'love' for natural style (Verb + -ing form). Also plural agreement and conciseness help: 'infrastructure' relates to 'building' so use possessive 'building's infrastructure' and 'are' for plural 'environment and infrastructure.' Recommend consistently using gerunds after verbs of preference and simplifying long clauses. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× Not necessarily. I don't really have a particular building in my mind that I would like to visit.

✓ Not necessarily. I don't really have a particular building in mind that I would like to visit.

The phrase 'in my mind' is acceptable but wordier than the common collocation 'in mind.' This is a present-tense usage preference: 'don't really have' is correct, but 'in my mind' is less idiomatic. Suggest using 'in mind' for natural present-tense expression. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× The thing about me is if I see a building that I want to visit in front of me, then I will go visit it instead of thinking about visiting it.

✓ The thing about me is that if I see a building I want to visit, I will go and visit it instead of just thinking about it.

This sentence has tense and style issues. Add 'that' after 'is' for correct clause linking. Use present simple 'see' and 'want' for conditional meaning and 'will go and visit' or 'will visit' for the future action. Remove redundant 'in front of me' and 'thinking about visiting it' to be more concise. This keeps correct present/future tense sequence. Grammar problem type ID: 6