建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cevap kısa ve anlaşılır fakat telaffuz duraklamaları ve dilbilgisi hataları dikkat çekiyor. Daha doğal olmak için gereksiz dolgu kelimelerini (umm, uh) azaltın; ‘government doesn’t allow tall buildings’ gibi basit ve doğru bir yapı kullanın. Ayrıca bir örnek veya kısa açıklama ekleyerek cevabı zenginleştirin (örn. güvenlik veya manzara yüzünden).

範例: No, there aren’t many tall buildings near my home because we live in a mountainous area and the local government restricts high-rise construction to preserve the landscape. For example, most houses are two or three storeys at most, which keeps the views open.

建議: Cevabınız ilgili fakat tekrarlar ve dolgu kelimeleri fazla. Daha doğal ve etkili bir cevap için net bir konu cümlesi verip, nedenlerden ve bir örnekten bahsedin. Ayrıca “feel like you experience the building’s bond” ifadesi belirsiz; daha açıklayıcı ve doğru kelimeler kullanın (örn. ‘sense their history or design’).

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing both modern and historical buildings because it helps me appreciate their design and history. For example, I recently photographed a Victorian townhouse and noticed details in the windows and brickwork that I had never seen before.

建議: Cevap niyeti açık fakat bilgi yanlışları ve karışık anlatım var; kişi ve yere dair isimler yanlış telaffuz veya yazım içeriyor (ör. ‘Anıtkabir’ ve ‘Atatürk’). Cümle yapısını düzeltin, gereksiz tekrarları kaldırın ve neden gitmek istediğinizi kısa, açık bir şekilde belirtin. Ayrıca tarihsel veya duygusal bir neden ekleyin.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit Anıtkabir in Ankara, the mausoleum of Mustafa Kemal Atatürk. I want to go there to pay my respects and to learn more about Turkey’s founding history, as the monument also has a museum with important documents.

× Umm, actually no, because we live in mountain area and governments, umm doesn't allow make tall buildings, uh, in that area.

✓ Umm, actually no, because we live in a mountainous area and the government doesn't allow tall buildings to be built in that area.

The sentence has several article and word-form errors. Use 'a' before 'mountainous area' and 'mountainous' as the adjective form. 'Governments' should be singular 'the government' to match the context; include the definite article 'the'. The verb structure 'doesn't allow make' is incorrect; use 'doesn't allow X to be built' or 'doesn't allow people to build X'. Also place 'to be built' after 'tall buildings' for correct passive meaning. Suggested improvement: practice using articles ('a', 'the') and passive infinitive structures ('allow something to be done').

× So we don't have uh, too much tall buildings.

✓ So we don't have too many tall buildings.

'Too much' is used with uncountable nouns; 'tall buildings' is countable plural, so use 'too many'. Also remove filler words for clarity. Suggested improvement: review quantifiers: 'many' with countable nouns, 'much' with uncountable nouns.'

× Yes, and actually I love taking photos such as modern shaped buildings and historical buildings.

✓ Yes, I actually love taking photos of modern-shaped buildings and historical buildings.

Use 'taking photos of' rather than 'taking photos such as'. Also 'modern-shaped' needs a hyphen and is used as an adjective before 'buildings'. Suggested improvement: practice verb + preposition collocations ('photos of') and compound adjectives formed with past participles or -ed forms.'

× Uh, it feels like uh, you experience uh, the buildings, umm, bond.

✓ Uh, it feels like you experience a connection with the buildings.

'Buildings bond' is unnatural. Use 'experience a connection with' or 'feel connected to'. Also choose correct noun 'connection' and preposition 'with' or 'to'. Suggested improvement: learn common collocations to express emotional responses ('feel connected to', 'experience a connection with').

× Yes, I want to visit Anout Kabir, a Tatar's grave, which which is a founder of Turkiye is located in Anuskabe, Ankara.

✓ Yes, I want to visit Anit Kabir, the tomb of Atatürk, who is the founder of Türkiye and is located in Anıtkabir, Ankara.

Multiple problems: the name is misspelled ('Anit Kabir' or 'Anıtkabir'), 'a Tatar's grave' is incorrect and misleading; the founder of Türkiye is Mustafa Kemal Atatürk, so 'the tomb of Atatürk' is appropriate. Use 'who' for the relative clause and 'is located in Anıtkabir, Ankara' or better 'located in Ankara'. Also correct country name 'Türkiye'. Suggested improvement: check proper nouns and use correct relative pronouns and noun phrases for persons ('the tomb of X', 'who is').

× So I want to visit there and thanks, uh, all of things that he, he's done.

✓ So I want to visit it and thank him for all the things he has done.

Use 'visit it' rather than 'visit there'. 'Thanks' should be 'thank him' to indicate the person being thanked. 'All of things that he, he's done' is redundant; use 'all the things he has done'. Suggested improvement: practice object pronouns ('visit it'), appropriate verbs ('thank someone'), and avoid redundant contractions; use present perfect 'has done' for past actions with present relevance.