建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two concise supporting details. Use correct articles and plural forms, avoid repetition, and limit to 2–3 sentences. Add a linking word when you give an additional point (for example, "also" or "for example").

範例: Yes — there are many tall buildings near my home. For example, I can see several high-rise apartment blocks and a few skyscrapers, which makes the area feel like a concrete jungle.

建議: Keep the answer direct and avoid awkward grammar. Use a topic sentence, then give a specific example and a brief reason. Use linking words such as "for example" or "also" to connect ideas, and correct verb forms (e.g., "I like to take" rather than "I would like to take").

範例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings. For example, I like photographing historical landmarks and unique modern designs because the details and shapes are interesting.

建議: Answer directly and reduce hesitations (uh). Use one clear topic sentence naming the building, then add 1–2 specific reasons with linking words (such as "because" or "and"). Avoid vague descriptors and correct names (e.g., check actual building name). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai. I want to see it at night because the tower is beautifully lit and there are impressive fountains nearby.

× Well I live in a area which are lots of which I can see lots of high rise building and a sky scrapper around me.

✓ Well, I live in an area where there are lots of high-rise buildings and a skyscraper around me.

Errors: incorrect article ('a area' should be 'an area'), wrong relative clause and verb agreement ('which are lots of which I can see' is ungrammatical), plural/singular mismatch and compound nouns ('high rise building' should be plural 'high-rise buildings', 'sky scrapper' misspelled and should be 'skyscraper'). Suggestion: use 'an' before vowel sound, use 'where there are' to describe existence and location, make nouns plural to match 'lots of', hyphenate 'high-rise'.

× It's a look like a concrete jungle.

✓ It looks like a concrete jungle.

Error: unnecessary 'a' and wrong verb form. 'It looks' is the correct subject-verb structure. Suggestion: remove the article and use the simple present 'looks' to describe appearance.

× Yes I do, when I see unique buildings and historical buildings I would like to take photos of them.

✓ Yes, I do. When I see unique or historical buildings, I like to take photos of them.

Errors: tense and modality. 'I would like to take photos' suggests conditional or future preference; simple present 'I like to take photos' is more natural when describing habitual action. Also combine 'unique buildings and historical buildings' to 'unique or historical buildings'. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and add commas for clarity.

× Also I'm interested in some buildings like churches or mosques to have take a picture of them.

✓ Also, I'm interested in photographing some buildings, like churches or mosques.

Errors: incorrect infinitive phrase 'to have take a picture' and awkward structure. Use gerund 'photographing' or phrase 'I like to take pictures of' to express interest. Suggestion: use a gerund after 'interested in' and correct verb forms.

× Yes, there is I would like to visit a Halifax tower, which is located in Dubai Uh, it is very beautiful uh and uh bit uh, colorful, uh uh lightning at night and uh fountains.

✓ Yes, there is. I would like to visit the Halifax Tower, which is located in Dubai. It is very beautiful, a bit colorful, and has lighting and fountains at night.

Errors: run-on sentence and article use. 'Yes, there is' needs punctuation; 'a Halifax tower' likely refers to a specific building so use 'the Halifax Tower'. 'bit colorful' needs article 'a bit colorful'. 'lightning' is incorrect word for building illumination; use 'lighting'. Also separate into clear sentences. Suggestion: use 'the' for specific known buildings, correct vocabulary ('lighting'), and proper punctuation.