建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid listing similar items without linking words and reduce repetition (e.g., “buildings” repeated).

範例: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home. For example, there is a large shopping plaza and several high-rise apartment blocks, which give the area a dense, urban feel.

建議: Make the response more natural and coherent: use a clear topic sentence, correct tense, and one or two linked reasons/examples. Avoid filler phrases like “and so on.” Use linking words for clarity.

範例: Yes, I do. If I see an unusual or striking building, I usually take photos or make short reels because I like capturing interesting architecture. For example, I recently filmed a reel of a building with a curved glass facade.

建議: Be direct and specific: give one clear example of a building you want to visit and explain why with one or two concise reasons. Avoid vague phrases and hesitations, and correct grammar (use full sentences).

範例: Yes. I would like to visit the Taj Mahal and the CN Tower. For instance, I want to see the Taj Mahal because of its famous architecture and history, and I would like to go up the CN Tower to enjoy the panoramic views of the city.

× At my home there's a Plaza, commercial buildings, residential buildings, apartments.

✓ At my home there's a plaza, some commercial buildings, residential buildings, and apartments.

The sentence mixes singular and plural nouns without correct articles or quantifiers. 'Plaza' should be lowercase and singular with 'a' before it; plural nouns need determiner like 'some' or commas plus 'and'. Use parallel structure for the list.

× Sometimes when I saw a unique building that time I usually take the photos and I also make the reels in front of the buildings, as well as taking snapshots and so on.

✓ Sometimes when I see a unique building I usually take photos and make reels in front of it, as well as take snapshots.

The original mixes past ('saw') and present habitual ('usually take'). Use present simple 'see' for habitual actions. Also adjust article use: 'take photos' (no 'the') and keep verbs parallel ('take' and 'make'). Replace 'in front of the buildings' with 'in front of it' to match 'a unique building.' Remove filler 'that time'.

× If the structure is unique to that, I may usually prefer to take photos.

✓ If the structure is unique, I will usually prefer to take photos.

'Unique to that' is incorrect; use 'unique' alone. 'May usually prefer' is awkward and mixes modality and frequency — use 'will usually prefer' or 'usually prefer.' 'If' clause with habitual preference fits better with 'will' or present simple; here 'will usually prefer' is clearer.

× Yes, there are a lot of values in my mind that I really lack.

✓ Yes, there are many things I value in my mind that I really lack.

The phrase 'a lot of values' is unnatural; use 'many things I value' or 'many values' depending on meaning. 'Values' plural can be used but context suggests 'things I value' (countable). Adjust word order for clarity.

× Would like to visit uh suggest Taj Mahal, Qutub, Minar as well as the CN Tower.

✓ I would like to visit the Taj Mahal, Qutub Minar, and the CN Tower.

The sentence is ungrammatical and missing subject 'I'. 'Would like to visit' needs a subject. Use correct names and articles: 'the Taj Mahal', 'Qutub Minar' (full name), and 'the CN Tower'. Remove filler 'uh suggest'.

× I saw CN Tower from the far but not the near so if ever I get a chance I definitely go and visit there.

✓ I saw the CN Tower from afar but not up close, so if I ever get a chance I will definitely go and visit it.

Use 'the CN Tower' with article. 'From the far' is incorrect; use 'from afar' or 'from far away'. 'Not the near' should be 'not up close'. For future intention use 'will definitely go and visit it.' Add object pronoun 'it' rather than 'there.'