建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid filler words (uh, umm). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Correct simple grammar (e.g., "I live on the seventh floor", "many constructions" → "a lot of construction"). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home because it is a newly developed residential area. In fact, a lot of construction is still ongoing, and I live on the seventh floor of one of the towers, so I have a clear view of the skyline.

建議: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and one specific reason and an example. Remove repetition and awkward phrasing, and use linking words like "usually" or "because." Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I sometimes take photos of buildings, usually in the late afternoon. I prefer sunset because the long shadows and warm light make the structures look dramatic, which I find very pleasing.

建議: Begin with a direct answer, then give specific reasons and use linking words (for example, "because" or "however"). Remove filler words and fix grammar: "the owners' building", "it is a duplex with a small garden", "we couldn't manage to go" and "I will definitely visit". Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes. I would like to visit my landlords' duplex because it has a small garden and pleasant outdoor space. They invited us before, but we couldn't manage to go, so I will definitely visit when I get the chance.

× I live in a residence where uh, so many construction are still going on.

✓ I live in a residence where so much construction is still going on.

'Construction' as an uncountable noun should use 'much' not 'many', and the verb should be singular 'is' to agree with the uncountable noun. Suggestion: treat 'construction' as uncountable (use much, a lot of, or 'many buildings' if countable).

× Umm I I also live in a 7th floor in a building.

✓ I also live on the seventh floor of a building.

Use the preposition 'on' with floors and 'of' to link to the building. Use ordinal adjective 'seventh' rather than numeral with 'th' after digit, and avoid repeating 'I'.

× Yes, sometimes I take photos of the buildings as mostly in the afternoon when the sun sets, I take photos of the building the and the shadows behind the buildings.

✓ Yes, sometimes I take photos of buildings, mostly in the afternoon when the sun sets; I photograph the buildings and the shadows behind them.

Remove unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'buildings' in general statements. Use consistent plural 'buildings' and replace awkward repetition. Use a semicolon or conjunction for clarity. 'Photograph' or 'take photos of' should apply to plural objects; use 'them' for the shadows' reference.

× It gives me pleasure.

✓ It gives me pleasure.

This sentence is grammatically correct. 'It gives me pleasure' correctly uses singular 'it' as a dummy subject and the singular verb 'gives'. No change needed.

× Yes, uh, there is a building of our owners, uh, the building is a duplex and there is a small garden in front of that building.

✓ Yes, there is a building owned by our landlords; the building is a duplex and there is a small garden in front of it.

Use 'owned by' for passive possession instead of 'of our owners'. Use 'landlords' or 'owners' as appropriate. Replace repeated 'that building' with pronoun 'it' for natural English. Use semicolon to join related clauses.

× So I would love to visit that building and umm, and the owner has invited us uh, before, but uh, somehow we didn't get managed to go there.

✓ So I would love to visit that building; the owner had invited us before, but somehow we didn't manage to go there.

Use past perfect 'had invited' to show the invitation occurred before the time of trying to go, and say 'didn't manage' rather than 'didn't get managed' which is incorrect passive-like construction. Remove unnecessary fillers.

× So if I get any chance later on, I will must visit there.

✓ So if I get a chance later on, I must visit there. OR So if I get a chance later on, I will definitely visit.

'Will must' is incorrect because must is a modal that cannot follow 'will'. Use 'must' alone to express obligation or 'will' with adverb 'definitely' to express strong intention. Also use 'a chance' (quantifier) and prefer 'visit there' to 'visit there' is acceptable but better 'visit it' referring to the building.