建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a brief specific detail to support it. Avoid redundant phrases like “near where I live” plus “I don't see” and keep it to one or two sentences. Use a linking word if you add extra information.

範例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. Most of the area is low-rise houses, so the skyline is quite flat even from the main road.

建議: Organize the answer: give a clear topic sentence, then explain briefly why you usually don’t, and finish with a concise exception using a linking word. Avoid repetition and correct grammar (e.g., "extraordinarily" or "very").

範例: Not usually — I'm not very good at photography, so I rarely take pictures of buildings. However, if a building is especially beautiful or eye-catching, I will take a photo of it.

建議: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating the building, then give two specific reasons using linking words (because/so/for example). Avoid informal fragments like "'Cause" and repetitive phrases. Be more precise about what attracts you (history, architecture, the Hall of Mirrors).

範例: I would like to visit the Palace of Versailles. I want to see the Hall of Mirrors because I’ve heard about its stunning decoration and the way the mirrors reflect light, and I’m also interested in its historical significance as a royal residence.

× No, near where I live I don't see tall buildings.

✓ No, there are no tall buildings near where I live.

The original sentence uses 'I don't see tall buildings' which is grammatically acceptable but sounds unnatural for describing existence. This is a 'There be' / present-tense existence context; per the allowed list (Present tense issue ID 6), prefer 'There are no tall buildings' to state existence. Use 'there are' with plural 'tall buildings' and place the phrase 'near where I live' after for natural word order. Suggestion: say 'There are no tall buildings near where I live.'

× I don't usually take photos of buildings because I am not really good at taking photos and taking photos and but I do take it if the buildings are extraordinary beautiful or eye-catching.

✓ I don't usually take photos of buildings because I'm not very good at photography, but I do take photos if a building is extraordinarily beautiful or eye-catching.

The original has repetition ('taking photos and taking photos and'), incorrect pronoun 'it' referring to 'photos', adjective/adverb forms, and article/number agreement. This matches 'Incorrect use of pronouns' (ID 12) and also 'Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs' (ID 13) but per instructions only correct types in the list — primary error chosen: pronoun misuse. Corrections made: replace 'I am not really good at taking photos' with 'I'm not very good at photography' to avoid repetition; change 'but I do take it' to 'but I do take photos'; change 'the buildings are extraordinary beautiful' to 'a building is extraordinarily beautiful' for correct adjective/adverb use and singular agreement with 'a building'. Suggestion: avoid repeating phrases, use 'photography' as a noun, and match pronouns to their antecedents; use adverb 'extraordinarily' to modify 'beautiful' or use 'extraordinarily beautiful'.

× I would want to visit the Versailles Palace.

✓ I would like to visit the Palace of Versailles.

The sentence uses 'would want' which is less natural than the common polite modal 'would like' for expressing desire; this falls under modal verb usage (ID 4). Also the place name is more naturally 'the Palace of Versailles'. Suggestion: use 'would like to' for polite requests or desires and use the standard English name 'the Palace of Versailles.'

× 'Cause I want to see the room of mirrors in my own eyes.

✓ Because I want to see the Hall of Mirrors with my own eyes.

The original uses colloquial ''Cause' and incorrect noun phrase 'room of mirrors' and awkward 'in my own eyes.' This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Correction: use 'Because' or 'I want to see' and the standard name 'Hall of Mirrors' and the idiom 'with my own eyes.' Suggestion: avoid informal ''Cause' in formal speech, use proper landmark names and the idiom 'with my own eyes.'

× I have heard a lot of things from that because it's beautiful and cause mirrors reflecting light.

✓ I have heard a lot about it because it's beautiful and the mirrors reflect the light.

The original mixes conjunctions ('because' and 'cause'), uses 'from that' incorrectly, and has a non-finite clause 'mirrors reflecting light' without proper structure. This matches 'Incorrect conjunction use' (ID 16) and also touches preposition and verb form errors but primary correction targets conjunctions. Correction: 'heard a lot about it' uses correct preposition; replace informal 'cause' with 'because' and change 'mirrors reflecting light' to 'the mirrors reflect the light.' Suggestion: use 'about' with 'heard' when referring to information, avoid repeating 'because/cause', and ensure clauses have a finite verb.