建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a direct, clear topic sentence first, then add one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (articles, prepositions, verb forms) and avoid redundancy. Be specific about distance and appearance. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. Most houses around here are medium-sized, but there is a new mall with a tall tower a few kilometers away. From the roof of my house we can clearly see its glass façade and bright signage.

建議: Start with a clear short answer and then explain with a specific reason and an example. Use linking words (but, because, for example). Fix tense and word order and avoid repetition like 'photo lots of.' Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Not usually, but I take photos if a building looks interesting. For example, I photographed a historic library last year because I liked its ornate façade and wanted a memory of the detail.

建議: Answer directly and state which building you want to visit. Use clear reasons with linking words (because, to see, to learn). Be specific about what you want to see (design, function, exhibitions) and fix grammar and sentence order. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the new cultural center downtown. I want to see its modern architecture and learn how the space is used for exhibitions and performances, because the building’s design looks unique from photos.

× There is a medium house all over, but in a far away from here we saw a tall building.

✓ There are mostly medium-sized houses here, but far from here we saw a tall building.

The student used singular 'house' when speaking about general buildings in the area; this requires plural 'houses'. Also 'medium house all over' is unnatural; use 'mostly medium-sized houses'. 'in a far away from here' is incorrect preposition and article use; correct phrase is 'far from here'. Suggestion: identify whether you mean many houses (use plural) and use 'far from here' for distance.

× It's a mall, and this is a new building, this city.

✓ It's a mall, and it is a new building in this city.

The original sentence omits the preposition 'in' and repeats pronouns, causing confusion. Use 'in this city' to show location and 'it is' rather than 'this is' for smoother reference. Suggestion: use a preposition of place (in) to link the building and the city.

× So we saw this building from our top of our house.

✓ So we saw this building from the top of our house.

The phrase 'from our top of our house' repeats possessive and uses article incorrectly. Use 'the top of our house' or 'from the roof of our house'. Suggestion: simplify to 'from the top of our house' or 'from our roof'.

× Not really, what if some building attractive then I can take photos of building and also myself on that building to memorize for a future I took photo lots of.

✓ Not really. If a building is attractive, I can take photos of the building and also take photos of myself at that building to remember it in the future; I have taken many photos before.

The original mixes conditional structures and tenses incorrectly. Use 'If a building is attractive' for a real conditional and 'I can take' for ability. Use 'take photos of myself at that building' for correct preposition. 'to memorize for a future I took photo lots of' is ungrammatical; replace with 'to remember it in the future' and correct past tense 'I have taken many photos'. Suggestion: separate sentences, use correct conditional ('If...'), and maintain consistent tense.

× Is there a building that you would like to visit? Student: Is of course, is there a new building that's look attractive?

✓ Of course. Is there a new building that looks attractive?

The student used 'Is of course' which is incorrect for affirmation; use 'Of course.' The question also misorders verb and relative clause: use 'that looks attractive' (third person singular agreement) rather than 'that's look attractive'. Suggestion: use 'Of course.' for yes and ensure subject-verb agreement in relative clauses.

× I like to visit this building because what kind of things in there and what they really use for that building and. Architecture.

✓ I would like to visit this building to see what kinds of things are inside it and what they are used for, and to appreciate the architecture.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and omits verbs. 'what kind of things in there' needs 'are' and plural 'kinds'. 'what they really use for that building' is unclear; replace with 'what they are used for'. 'Architecture' should be connected with a verb phrase. Suggestion: include verbs ('are', 'are used') and use clear pronouns; restructure into a complete sentence.