建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect relative clauses. For example, say where you live, describe nearby buildings briefly, and give a specific name once.

範例: Yes. I live in a high-rise condominium, and there are several similar tall apartment buildings nearby. For instance, the Sienna Tower is just a five-minute walk from my condo, so the neighborhood has a very vertical skyline.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence and a clear reason, then add one short example or exception. Reduce fillers like “umm” and avoid vague phrases. Use linking words such as because or however to connect ideas logically.

範例: No, I usually don't photograph buildings because they don't interest me much. However, I sometimes take photos if a building has unusual architecture or during travel when a landmark looks especially impressive.

建議: Start with a clear answer, then give a specific example and a reason using linking words. Mention one or two famous buildings you studied to make your response concrete and authentic.

範例: I don't have a single dream building, but because I studied architecture I would like to visit several famous examples. For example, I would love to see the Guggenheim Museum in Bilbao for its sculptural form and the Sydney Opera House because of its distinctive roof design.

× Yes there are actually.

✓ Yes, there are, actually.

The original sentence lacks necessary commas for natural speech rhythm but more importantly is acceptable; however in context it should be linked to the noun phrase that follows. Using 'Yes, there are, actually' clarifies the existence reply. Suggestion: include appropriate punctuation and follow with the noun being referred to (e.g. 'Yes, there are tall buildings.').

× I'm living in condo so which is tall buildings itself and there are similar buildings near my condo and Sienna tower.

✓ I live in a condo that is a tall building, and there are similar buildings near my condo, including the Sienna Tower.

The continuous 'I'm living' is unnecessary for a permanent situation; use simple present 'I live'. Missing article 'a' before 'condo'. The clause 'which is tall buildings itself' is ungrammatical—use a relative clause 'that is a tall building'. 'Sienna tower' needs capitalization and 'including' clarifies it is one of the nearby buildings. Suggestion: use simple present for permanent residence, include articles, and form correct relative clauses.

× There is a Sienna tower near.

✓ There is a Sienna Tower nearby.

Use 'nearby' as the correct adverb/adverbial, not 'near' at sentence end alone. Capitalize the proper noun 'Sienna Tower'. Also 'There is a' is fine for singular existence. Suggestion: use 'nearby' or add an object (e.g. 'near my home').

× I usually don't take photos of buildings because it's not special for me so umm, I think I don't need to take photos of them but sometimes umm.

✓ I usually don't take photos of buildings because they aren't special to me, so I don't feel the need to photograph them, although sometimes I do.

'It's not special for me' is awkward—use 'they aren't special to me' referencing 'buildings' (plural). Repetition 'I think I don't need to take photos' is wordy; use 'I don't feel the need to photograph them'. 'Photograph' is a better verb here. Ensure subject-pronoun agreement and natural adverb placement. Suggestion: refer back to plural noun with 'they', avoid filler words, and use concise phrasing.

× To be honest, I don't have any specific buildings I want to visit, but I've learned architecture so I want to see famous buildings I learned.

✓ To be honest, I don't have any specific buildings I want to visit, but I studied architecture, so I want to see the famous buildings I learned about.

'I've learned architecture' is not natural for studying a subject—use 'I studied architecture' or 'I've studied architecture'. The final clause 'famous buildings I learned' is incomplete; use 'the famous buildings I learned about' to indicate topics covered in study. Ensure tense consistency: past study 'studied' aligns with current desire 'I want to see'. Suggestion: use proper verb for education ('studied') and include preposition 'about' with 'learned'.