建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (umm), and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep to at most 3–4 short sentences.

範例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home because I live in the countryside. Most houses here are only two stories high, so the skyline is quite low. For example, the nearest town has only small shops and cottages.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence, remove hesitations, and briefly explain why with a specific reason and a linking word. One or two supporting details are enough.

範例: No, I rarely photograph buildings because I don’t enjoy taking photos in general. Instead, I prefer capturing landscapes when I travel, for instance I usually take pictures of mountains and rivers.

建議: Open with a clear statement, reduce redundancy, and add a specific reason and brief plan using linking words. Keep sentences natural and varied in vocabulary.

範例: Yes. Even though I’m Taiwanese, I’ve never visited Taipei 101, so I’d like to go. I want to see the observation deck and learn about its architecture, and I would probably visit with my family next holiday.

× No, there are not any tall buildings near my house because I live in the countryside so most of the buildings are not that tall and also umm umm.

✓ No, there are no tall buildings near my house because I live in the countryside, so most of the buildings are not very tall.

Use 'there are no' instead of 'there are not any' for more natural negative statement; 'most of the buildings' is correct plural. Also replace colloquial 'umm umm' with a pause or remove it; use 'not very tall' rather than 'not that tall' for clarity and register. Ensure punctuation between clauses.

× No, I rarely take photos of buildings. Umm, or I can say I'm not the person who really like to take photos, even for people or buildings.

✓ No, I rarely take photos of buildings. Umm, or I can say I'm not the person who really likes to take photos, even of people or buildings.

Relative clause refers to 'the person' (singular), so the verb must be 'likes' (third person singular). Also use 'of' after 'even' when listing objects photographed. Removing duplicated 'Umm' improves fluency.

× Yes, although I'm a Taiwanese but I have never been to Taipei 101, so if I have time I would try to plan a trip to visit Taipei 101 and with my friends or family.

✓ Yes, although I'm Taiwanese, I have never been to Taipei 101, so if I have time I would try to plan a trip to visit Taipei 101 with my friends or family.

Do not use the article 'a' before nationalities when using adjective form: 'I'm Taiwanese' is correct. Also remove 'but' after 'although' because both are conjunctions; use one ('although' alone) and follow with a comma. Remove the extra 'and' before 'with my friends or family' to correct sentence structure.