建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 発音と語彙の選択を改善してください。単語の誤発音（toll → tall、near nearの繰り返し、undertakerなど）や語順の混乱が見られます。答えは最初に簡潔に「はい」と述べ、続けて具体的な理由（例：家賃高騰、土地不足、コンドミニアムの増加）を一つか二つの文で整理して述べてください。つなぎ語（because、so、therefore）を使って論理を明確にし、文は3〜4文以内にまとめましょう。

範例: Yes, there are some tall buildings near my home. Because housing is scarce in Canada, many developers build high-rise condos to save space. As a result, rents have gone up and more people live in these towers.

建議: 表現を簡潔にし、正しい語彙を使ってください。'undertaker'は不適切な語で、繰り返しや語順の混乱があります。まず短い主題文で答え（No, I don't usually take photos of buildings.）を示し、次に興味の対象（heritage and scenery）を説明する具体的な理由や例を付け加えてください。接続詞（because, so）や副詞（usually, rather）を使って自然に繋げましょう。

範例: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings. I prefer photographing historic sites and natural scenery because they have more character and tell a story. For example, I like capturing old churches and mountain views.

建議: 答えは比較的明確ですが、語彙と文法を整えて自然にしましょう。繰り返し（visit, visit）や不必要な間（uh）を減らし、理由を具体的に述べると良いです。例えば、雰囲気のどの点が特別か（テーマ、アトラクション、デザイン）を一つか二つ挙げ、最後に願望をはっきり示してください。全体を2〜4文でまとめてください。

範例: Yes, I would like to visit Disney World. It looks very large and has a unique, magical atmosphere with themed parks and attractions. I hope to go there at least once to experience the rides and shows.

× Yes there are toll buildings near near my home.

✓ Yes, there are tall buildings near my home.

The student used 'toll' (wrong word) and repeated 'near'. Also 'buildings' plural is fine; main errors are spelling and redundancy. Correct by using 'tall' and removing duplicate 'near'. Improve by proofreading for typos and avoiding repetition.

× Canada rent is very high because Canada Canada shortage around house so condo is very increasing in Canada.

✓ Rent in Canada is very high because there is a shortage of housing, so condominium prices are increasing.

This sentence has multiple problems: word order, repetition, and incorrect expressions. 'Canada rent' should be 'Rent in Canada'; 'Canada Canada' is a repetition; 'shortage around house' should be 'shortage of housing'; 'condo is very increasing' is incorrect—use 'condominium prices are increasing' or 'condos are becoming more expensive'. Use 'there is' for existence. Improve by simplifying into clear clauses and using correct collocations (shortage of housing, condominium prices).

× No, I don't undertaker buildings I more I would take I more interested in heritage and scenery.

✓ No, I don't take photos of buildings. I am more interested in heritage and scenery.

'Undertaker' is incorrect word choice; 'I don't take photos of buildings' matches the question. The second part has incorrect structure: 'I more I would take I more interested' should be 'I am more interested in...'. Use the present simple or present continuous for preferences: 'I am more interested in' or 'I prefer'. Improve by using correct verbs and simple sentence structure.

× Yes, I would like to visit, visit to Disney World. Uh, there are big and special atmosphere. I want to go here at least once in my life.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit Disney World. It has a big, special atmosphere. I want to go there at least once in my life.

Remove the duplicated 'visit' and correct preposition: 'visit Disney World' (no 'to'). 'There are big and special atmosphere' is ungrammatical: 'It has a big, special atmosphere' or 'There is a big, special atmosphere'. Use 'there' instead of 'here' because talking about Disney World, so 'go there'. Improve by fixing redundancy, using correct subject-verb agreement ('it has' or 'there is') and correct demonstrative pronoun ('there').