建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct tense and articles, avoid repetitions, and add one or two specific details using linking words. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes. I live in Vancouver and there are several tall buildings near my home, especially around Scott Road and the Atos venues. I enjoy looking at them because their glass facades reflect the sky, which makes the skyline look very impressive.

建議: Use clear sentence structure and correct verb forms. Begin with a direct answer, then give specific reasons and one example. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to connect ideas and avoid redundant adjectives.

範例: Yes, I do. I often photograph buildings at night because their lights and illuminated signage create striking contrasts. For example, I recently took pictures of a waterfront high-rise whose reflection in the river looked stunning.

建議: Be specific and fluent. Answer directly (which building), give a clear reason, and include one concrete detail or personal plan. Avoid fillers and repeat words; use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

範例: I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is the tallest building in the world and its observation deck offers panoramic views. For example, I plan to take a photo from the base looking up to capture how incredibly tall it feels compared with a person.

× Yeah, so I am currently living in Vancouver.

✓ Yeah, I currently live in Vancouver.

Use simple present 'live' for a current state or habitual residence rather than present continuous 'am living' which suggests a temporary action. Use 'I currently live' for clarity and naturalness.

× There was very tall buildings near my home.

✓ There were very tall buildings near my home.

This sentence has two issues: subject-verb agreement and article/number. 'Buildings' is plural so use 'were' not 'was'. Also include an article or determiner if needed ('very tall buildings' is acceptable without an article). Correct the verb to match the plural subject.

× It's like near the Ato venues, Scott Rd.

✓ They are near the ATO venues on Scott Road.

The original uses 'It's like' which is vague and singular while referring to plural buildings. Use a clear subject 'They' (the buildings) and correct preposition 'on Scott Road'. Also use the proper name capitalization and consistent phrasing.

× And I love to watch like that tall buildings, like they look so eternal and beautiful.

✓ And I love to look at those tall buildings; they look so timeless and beautiful.

Use 'look at' rather than 'watch' for buildings. Use 'those' for plural distant objects, not 'that'. 'Eternal' is awkward for appearance; 'timeless' is more natural. Adjust verb forms and pronouns for agreement.

× It's so bad.

✓ They're so beautiful.

'It's so bad' contradicts the previous praise; likely the speaker meant a positive comment. Change to 'They're so beautiful' to match context. Also correct number agreement: plural subject 'they'.

× It's so look amazing.

✓ They look so amazing.

'It's so look amazing' is ungrammatical: remove 'so' before verb and use correct subject 'they' for plural 'buildings'. Correct structure is 'They look so amazing.'

× I love to.

✓ I love them too.

'I love to' is incomplete. Use 'I love them too' to clearly refer back to the buildings and to mirror 'me too' meaning.

× Yeah, I love to take the photos of the building because at the night time the buildings having the light on or sometimes buildings have some text written on it which looks so beautiful and amazing.

✓ Yeah, I love to take photos of the buildings because at night the buildings have their lights on, or sometimes buildings have text written on them which looks very beautiful and amazing.

Use 'take photos' (no 'the' before plural in general), 'at night' instead of 'at the night time'. Use correct verb 'have' for possession, not 'having'. Match plural 'buildings' with 'them' rather than 'it'. Use 'their lights' for natural phrasing.

× And I love to create that photo and which show the buildings and the showing the wonderful Vancouver area and the beautiful British Columbia.

✓ And I love to create photos that show the buildings and showcase the wonderful Vancouver area and beautiful British Columbia.

Use plural 'photos' if speaking generally. Replace 'which show' with 'that show' for defining relative clause. Remove redundant 'the showing' and use 'showcase' for clarity. Drop unnecessary definite articles before proper nouns.

× Maybe the Paris and uh, like the Dubai building because it's a very tall building, like the Burj Khalifa is very tall building and it's so look long.

✓ Maybe the Paris building, and the Dubai building, because the Burj Khalifa is a very tall building and it looks so long.

Remove unnecessary 'the' before cities when naming buildings; use 'the Burj Khalifa' is correct but add 'a' before 'very tall building' or restructure. Use 'it looks' not 'it's so look'. Adjust articles and verb forms for clarity.

× If you are standing beside the Burj Khalifa, you look so small.

✓ If you stand beside the Burj Khalifa, you look very small.

Use simple present 'If you stand' for general truth (conditional). 'Very small' is more natural than 'so small' here but both are acceptable; 'very' is clearer.

× I, I just want to recreate that photo of me to, to show to my friend.

✓ I just want to recreate a photo of myself to show my friend.

Use 'recreate a photo of myself' (reflexive pronoun) and 'show my friend' (no extra 'to'). Remove repeated filler words. 'Friend' can be singular without 'to'.