建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammatical accuracy and clarity: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid filler words, use correct articles and plural forms, and limit yourself to 2–3 supportive sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'because' and 'so'). Be concise and natural.

範例: Not really. There is an international airport near my home, so authorities prohibit tall buildings to avoid disturbing air traffic. As a result, the area mostly has low-rise housing and open spaces.

建議: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Remove fillers and repetitions, use correct articles and plural forms, and add a linking word to explain why you take photos (for example, 'because' or 'so').

範例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings because I enjoy unusual architecture. For example, when I travel I photograph antique temples and modern structures to capture their unique details and design.

建議: Make your response chronological and accurate: begin with a clear statement, then give specific reasons. Remove hesitations and correct contradictory statements (e.g., 'collapsed' vs 'reconstructed'). Use 2–3 sentences and linking words such as 'however' or 'because'.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit Dharahara in Kathmandu because it has been rebuilt after the 2024 earthquake and looks very impressive. I saw photos on social media and I want to see its architecture and the city views from the tower.

× Not really. Uh, near my home there is a International Airport.

✓ Not really. Uh, near my home there is an international airport.

Use 'an' before a noun beginning with a vowel sound (international). Also common nouns should be lowercase unless part of a proper name; 'international airport' is used generally here, so lowercase is appropriate. Suggestion: Use 'a' or 'an' correctly by listening to the initial sound of the following word and capitalize proper nouns only.

× Because of the International Airport project, we cannot build a long tall buildings or infrastructure which really disturbing our view and like it will disturb the Airways.

✓ Because of the international airport project, we cannot build long tall buildings or infrastructure, which really disturbs our view and would disturb the airways.

'Buildings' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a/long' in singular form; remove 'a' and keep plural noun. The clause 'which really disturbing' lacks a verb form; use present simple 'disturbs' to agree with singular noun 'infrastructure' or general situation. 'Will disturb the Airways' is better expressed as 'would disturb the airways' to show consequence/possibility. Also 'Airways' should be lowercase 'airways' here. Suggestion: Match articles to singular/plural nouns, use correct verb forms for relative clauses, and choose modal expressions that reflect certainty.

× So we cannot build a tall buildings near our.

✓ So we cannot build tall buildings near our home.

Do not use the article 'a' before a plural noun 'buildings'; remove 'a'. The sentence was missing the object after 'our' – use 'our home' to complete it. Also 'tall buildings' is plural, so no article. Suggestion: Ensure plural nouns are not preceded by singular articles and complete possessive expressions with a noun.

× I usually take a pictures of buildings when I see the different structure of the buildings like around or uh, antique or religious sites.

✓ I usually take pictures of buildings when I see different structures, like old or religious sites.

'Take a pictures' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'pictures' – remove 'a'. 'The different structure' should be plural 'different structures' or 'a different structure'; 'antique' as adjective is awkward for sites; 'old' or 'historic' is better. Also simplify wording. Suggestion: Ensure articles match noun number and pluralize nouns when referring to multiple items; choose appropriate adjectives.

× Whenever I visit or travel to some places, I see the unique unique construction or infrastructure.

✓ Whenever I visit or travel to places, I see unique constructions or infrastructure.

Avoid repeating words ('unique unique'). 'Construction' here should be plural if referring to many different structures. 'Some places' can be simplified to 'places'. Suggestion: Avoid repetition and match noun plurality to context.

× I take the picture of building.

✓ I take pictures of buildings.

'The picture of building' is incorrect because it uses singular 'picture' and singular 'building' without article; if speaking generally, use plural 'pictures of buildings'. If referring to a specific building, say 'I take a picture of the building.' Suggestion: Decide whether you mean general habit (use plurals) or a specific instance (use 'a' + singular) and adjust articles accordingly.

× Yeah, I would love to visit, uh, Dahara, which is located in Kathmandu, like that building has been collapsed because of the earthquake in 2024, but it's already constructed.

✓ Yeah, I would love to visit Dahara, which is located in Kathmandu. That building collapsed in the 2024 earthquake, but it has since been rebuilt.

The original mixes tenses and has awkward phrasing 'has been collapsed' (passive with intransitive verb). 'Has been collapsed' is incorrect; use 'collapsed' for past event. 'But it's already constructed' is unclear; use 'it has since been rebuilt' to show reconstruction after collapse. Also split into two clear sentences for readability. Suggestion: Use correct verb forms for intransitive verbs (collapsed) and use present perfect for actions completed with present relevance ('has been rebuilt'). Keep sentence structure clear.

× So I want to go there once in my life, which is, which looks really interesting.

✓ So I want to go there once in my life; it looks really interesting.

The clause 'which is, which looks' is redundant and ungrammatical. Replace with a clear independent clause. Also 'once in my life' is acceptable but 'at least once in my life' is more natural. Suggestion: Avoid redundant relative clauses and prefer concise independent clauses; consider 'at least once in my life' for emphasis.

× I have seen this in the social media, so I want to go there.

✓ I have seen it on social media, so I want to go there.

Use 'it' rather than 'this' when referring back to a previously mentioned place. Use the preposition 'on' with 'social media' rather than 'in'. Omit 'the' before 'social media' unless referring to a specific platform. Suggestion: Use correct pronouns to refer back and correct prepositions with set phrases like 'on social media'.