建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct subject-verb agreement, avoid repetition, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct distance expressions and word choice.

範例: No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home because I live in a rural area about 20 kilometres from the city. However, in Surabaya, which is about 50 kilometres away, there are many skyscrapers and high-rise apartments.

建議: Give a direct answer, then briefly explain with specific reasons and linkers. Avoid hesitations and vague phrases like 'for myself alone.' Use precise vocabulary (e.g. landscapes, nature, architecture) and limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: No, I don't usually photograph buildings because there aren't many interesting examples nearby. Instead, I prefer taking landscape and nature photos because they help me relax and I enjoy looking back at them later.

建議: Answer directly, use correct noun forms and grammar, and give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words like 'um' and 'uh.' Mention what specifically interests you (history, architecture, mosaics) to add detail.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the Hagia Sophia in Turkey because it is a historic building with unique Byzantine architecture and stunning mosaics. I am especially interested in its long history as both a church and a mosque, which makes it culturally fascinating to me.

× 'No, I live in a rural area which are, which is 20 kilometers away from the city.'

✓ 'No, I live in a rural area which is 20 kilometers away from the city.'

'Subject-verb agreement error: "area" is singular so the relative clause must use singular verb "is" not "are". Suggestion: use "which is" or rephrase to "that is 20 kilometers away".'

× 'So here we don't have any tall buildings.'

✓ 'So we don't have any tall buildings here.'

'Word order: not a plural issue but placement improves naturalness; sentence is grammatically acceptable but moving "here" to the end sounds more natural in English. Keep plural "buildings" because it refers to multiple buildings.'

× 'But in Surabaya, which is much far 50 kilometers away from here, there are skyscrapers and high rises there.'

✓ 'But in Surabaya, which is much farther, about 50 kilometers away from here, there are skyscrapers and high-rises.'

'Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and redundancy: "far" should be comparative adverb "farther" or "further" and the distance should be set off with commas or "about". Also avoid repeating "there" twice. Use hyphen in "high-rises" or write "high rises" consistently.'

× 'No, I don't like taking photos of buildings since there are not many high rise buildings here.'

✓ 'No, I don't like taking photos of buildings since there are not many high-rise buildings here.'

'Third person singular issue not directly, but this is an adjective formation error: "high rise" as a compound modifier should be hyphenated when before a noun: "high-rise buildings." Suggestion: use hyphen or use "tall buildings." '

× 'Umm, I prefer taking photos of landscapes and nature so that I could enjoy it later for myself alone.'

✓ 'Umm, I prefer taking photos of landscapes and nature so that I can enjoy them later by myself.'

'Tense and pronoun number: Use present tense modal "can" to match "prefer" for habitual action, not "could" which suggests conditional past. Also match plural "them" to "photos" and use "by myself" instead of "for myself alone" for natural phrasing.'

× 'Yeah, I would like to visit Turkey, specifically in Hagia Sofia Museum.'

✓ 'Yeah, I would like to visit Turkey, specifically the Hagia Sophia Museum.'

'Article errors: Use definite article "the" before the name of a specific museum. Also the correct name is "Hagia Sophia" (not Sofia). Place preposition "in" is unnecessary with "visit" + place name.'

× 'Umm, it is uh, historical buildings and have a really unique architecture, so I want to visit there sooner or later.'

✓ 'Umm, it is a historical building with really unique architecture, so I want to visit it sooner or later.'

'Singular/plural and verb agreement: "it" refers to a single museum, so use singular noun "building" not plural "buildings" and change verb "have" to singular "has," or rephrase as shown. Also use "visit it" instead of "visit there." '