建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cevap doğrudan ve anlaşılır, ancak tekrarlar ve dolgu kelimeleri var. Cümle yapısını daha doğal hale getirmek için tekrarları kaldırın, zamanları tutarlı kullanın ve daha fazla özgül detay ekleyin (ör. kaç katlı binalar, hangi bölgede). Bağlaçlar kullanarak cümleleri akıcı bağlayın.

範例: Not really — I live in a small town so there aren’t many tall buildings nearby. When I lived in Istanbul, however, I often photographed high-rises, especially those around the business district.

建議: Cevap ilgili ama karışık ve anlamsız bir cümle içeriyor (‘I started breathtaking’ anlamlı değil). Gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın ve net bir yapı kurun: kısa konu cümlesi + destekleyici ayrıntı (neden fotoğraf çektiğinize veya ne tür binaları çektiğinize dair). Bağlaçlarla tutarlılık sağlayın.

範例: Yes, I used to take a lot of photos when I lived in Istanbul because I enjoyed the architecture. Now that I live in a small town, I rarely photograph buildings since there are fewer interesting structures.

建議: Cevap net ama tekrarlar ve anlamsız ifadeler (“after clamp there”, “breathtaking waves”) yanlışa yol açıyor. İki veya üç kısa cümleyle niyeti belirtin ve nedenini somut bir gerekçe ile açıklayın (manzara, tarih, deneyim). Gereksiz dolgu sözcüklerinden kaçının.

範例: I’d love to visit the Empire State Building and go up to the observation deck because the views of New York City must be spectacular. I’m especially interested in seeing the skyline at sunset.

建議: Cevap anlaşılır fakat dilbilgisi hataları ve tekrarlar var (“we lived on the second floor of that buildings”). Daha doğal ve doğru gramer kullanın; kısa bir konu cümlesi kurup tercih nedeninizi belirtin (ör. manzara, gürültü, güvenlik). Bağlaçlarla nedeni destekleyin.

範例: I’m open to living in a tall building — I lived in one in Istanbul for three years. I would prefer a higher floor rather than the ground floor because it’s quieter and offers better views.

× I live in a small town, there aren't many tall buildings in here.

✓ I live in a small town; there aren't many tall buildings here.

Use of the preposition 'in' before 'here' is unnecessary. 'Here' already indicates location, so 'in here' is redundant or used for entering a place. Also replace the comma with a semicolon or separate sentences to avoid comma splice. Improve by saying 'there aren't many tall buildings here.'

× Uh, but I used to live in Istanbul.

✓ I used to live in Istanbul.

The sentence is correct but remove filler 'Uh' for clarity. 'Used to' correctly indicates a past habitual situation. No tense change needed.

× I captured many tall buildings on my phone.

✓ I took many photos of tall buildings with my phone.

'Captured' is not wrong but sounds unnatural in this context; more natural collocation is 'took photos of' or 'took pictures of'. Also use 'with my phone' to indicate the instrument.

× When I was living in Istanbul, I captured many tall buildings on my phone, but now I live in a small town.

✓ When I lived in Istanbul, I took many photos of tall buildings with my phone, but now I live in a small town.

Prefer simple past 'lived' with 'when' for a past situation. Use 'took' instead of 'captured' and 'with my phone' for natural phrasing.

× There aren't many tall buildings in here.

✓ There aren't many tall buildings here.

Same preposition issue as before: 'in here' is redundant. Use 'here' to indicate location.

× But uh, I started breathtaking.

✓ But, uh, I was amazed by the view.

'Started breathtaking' is ungrammatical. 'Breathtaking' is an adjective; you cannot 'start' an adjective without a verb form. Use a verb phrase like 'I was amazed by the view' or 'I started to feel breathless' depending on intended meaning.

× I would like to visit Empire State Building.

✓ I would like to visit the Empire State Building.

Buildings with proper names usually require the definite article 'the' before the name. Use 'the Empire State Building.'

× Uh, I would like to go to the top of the Empire State Building, uh, after clamp there.

✓ I would like to go to the top of the Empire State Building after I get there.

'After clamp there' is not meaningful. Likely intended 'after I get there' or 'when I am there.' Replace with 'after I get there' to convey sequence.

× I enjoy breathtaking waves.

✓ I enjoy the breathtaking views.

'Breathtaking waves' may be incorrect if referring to views from the building. Use 'breathtaking views.' If the student meant waves (sea), keep 'breathtaking waves' but ensure context fits. Also add 'the' for specificity.

× When I was living in Istanbul, I lived tall buildings for about 3 years.

✓ When I lived in Istanbul, I lived in tall buildings for about three years.

Use 'lived in' for residence; include 'in' after 'lived' and write numbers as words in formal speech optionally. Also simple past 'lived' is preferred over 'was living' for a completed period.

× Unfortunately we lived on the second floor of that buildings.

✓ Unfortunately, we lived on the second floor of that building.

Use singular 'building' after 'that' which requires singular. Also add a comma after 'Unfortunately'. If referring to multiple buildings use 'those buildings'.

× I would like to live higher floor rather than ground floor.

✓ I would like to live on a higher floor rather than on the ground floor.

Add preposition 'on' before floors; use 'a higher floor' for unspecified floor and include 'on the ground floor'. The comparative structure needs articles and prepositions.