建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: ปรับประโยคให้ถูกรูปแบบและชัดเจน ใช้ประธาน-กริยาให้สอดคล้องกัน ลดคำอืดอาด (uh, um) และอธิบายรายละเอียดสั้นๆ เช่น สถานที่หรือชื่ออาคารอย่างชัดเจน พร้อมเชื่อมประโยคด้วยคำเชื่อมง่ายๆ เช่น "for example" หรือ "such as" เพื่อความลื่นไหล

範例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, there is the York Tower 2, which is a prominent skyscraper in the area.

建議: ลดการใช้คำอืดอาดและซ้ำคำ เริ่มด้วยประโยคตรงตอบคำถามตามด้วยเหตุผลสั้นๆ ใช้เชื่อมเพื่อให้ลื่นไหล เช่น "because" หรือ "rather" และให้รายละเอียดเฉพาะเจาะจงมากขึ้นว่าชอบถ่ายอะไรและทำไม

範例: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I prefer photographing nature. For example, I enjoy capturing landscapes and wildlife because they feel more peaceful and interesting.

建議: โครงสร้างประโยคสับสนและคำศัพท์บางคำใช้ไม่ถูกต้อง ควรตอบตรงๆ ระบุอาคารที่ต้องการเยี่ยมชมและเหตุผล ใช้คำเชื่อมเช่น "because" หรือ "for example" และหลีกเลี่ยงคำซ้ำและการสะกดผิด (เช่น "Baiyoke Tower")

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the Baiyoke Tower in Bangkok because it is one of the tallest buildings in Thailand and offers great panoramic views of the city.

建議: ทำประโยคให้ชัดเจนและถูกต้องทางไวยากรณ์ ตอบตรงๆ ว่าต้องการหรือไม่ แล้วให้เหตุผลสั้นๆ ใช้คำเชื่อม เช่น "because" และให้รายละเอียดที่เป็นรูปธรรม เช่น ความสะดวกสบาย ความปลอดภัย หรือมุมมองจากชั้นสูง

範例: In the future, I would like to live in a tall condominium because it is convenient and usually offers good security and nice views of the city.

× Yes, there are tall building near my home.

✓ Yes, there are tall buildings near my home.

The noun 'building' should be plural 'buildings' to agree with the plural verb phrase 'there are'. Use plural for countable nouns when referring to more than one. Suggestion: check subject-verb number and make countable nouns plural when appropriate.

× It's help us sky rocket.

✓ They help us to see the skyline.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and uses incorrect verb form. 'It's' (it is) does not match the plural subject 'tall buildings'; 'help' needs a subject and proper infinitive. I corrected meaning to 'They help us to see the skyline' to match context. Suggestion: ensure subject agrees with verb and use 'help someone to do something' or 'help someone do something'.

× Uh, caught by York 2.

✓ It's called Baiyoke Tower 2.

This fragment lacks a verb and clear subject. 'Caught by York 2' is ungrammatical. The likely intended phrase is 'It's called Baiyoke Tower 2' (the tower's name). Suggestion: use full clause with subject and verb when naming something: 'It is called...'.

× Umm, no, not at all. I don't like to take photo of a building.

✓ Umm, no, not at all. I don't like to take photos of buildings.

Countable nouns 'photo' and 'building' should be plural when speaking generally. Use present simple 'don't like' correctly with plural nouns. Suggestion: when speaking generally about taking pictures of buildings, use plural forms 'photos' and 'buildings'.

× I I like to umm, have a picture of a natural environment or a wildlife.

✓ I like to have pictures of natural environments or wildlife.

Repeated 'I' is erroneous and 'a' should not be used before uncountable 'wildlife' or plural 'natural environments'. Use plural 'pictures' for general preference. Suggestion: remove duplicate words and choose correct article/number for countable and uncountable nouns.

× Absolutely. Umm, I have redeemed through a research, uh, skyscrapers, uh, in Thailand it's called a bayok too because it's a higher umm number of higher highest tower in Thailand.

✓ Absolutely. I have researched skyscrapers in Thailand; one is called Baiyoke Tower because it is one of the tallest towers in Thailand.

Original sentence has multiple structure issues: 'redeemed through a research' is incorrect; 'research' should be a verb phrase 'researched' or 'done research on'. 'It's called a bayok too' is unclear and misnamed; 'higher umm number of higher highest tower' is ungrammatical. I corrected to a clear past action and proper superlative comparison. Suggestion: use 'research' as noun with 'do' or use 'research' as past verb 'researched', and use 'one of the tallest' for comparisons.

× Uh, in the future if I would have a shin, uh, I will umm, because uh, living in a condominium is uh, easy to clean up a loom.

✓ In the future, if I have the chance, I will, because living in a condominium is easy to maintain.

Use simple present in the if-clause for real future conditions ('if I have'), not 'if I would have'. 'Have a shin' is unclear; likely 'have the chance'. 'Clean up a loom' is incorrect word choice; 'maintain' or 'clean' suits living spaces. Suggestion: use 'if' + present simple for future conditionals and choose precise vocabulary for meaning.