建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and correct grammatical errors. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid incorrect words (e.g., “high prices”) and fix articles and pronouns.

範例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home in Bangkok. For example, there are several new condominiums and office towers along Sukhumvit Road, which give the skyline a modern look. However, because there are so many high-rises, the area can feel crowded and traffic is often heavy.

建議: Answer directly and avoid filler words. Correct sentence structure and vocabulary: say you do not take photos and give a clear reason with a relevant detail. Remove unrelated words like “potassium.”

範例: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I'm not very active on social media. I prefer to admire the architecture in person, especially when a façade has interesting details or historical features.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence naming a particular building or type, then add specific reasons and use linking words. Fix grammar (e.g., “they own culture” → “they reflect their culture”) and avoid incomplete sentences.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit ancient temples such as Wat Pho in Bangkok because they reflect Thai culture and history. Moreover, the intricate architecture and murals would be fascinating to see up close.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons using linking words. Improve grammar and fluency (e.g., “rather than a building,” “offers me more privacy and a quiet place to relax”).

範例: No, I would prefer to live in a house rather than a tall building because I value privacy and quiet. For instance, a detached house usually has a garden and less noise from neighbors, which helps me relax after work.

× Yes, there are many tall buildings around here in my home in Bangkok. I enjoy my city because the high prices look impressive, but sometimes I think there are too many because they make a feel crowded and congested.

✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings around my home in Bangkok. I enjoy my city because the high rises look impressive, but sometimes I think there are too many because they make it feel crowded and congested.

The phrase 'around here in my home in Bangkok' is wordy; 'around my home in Bangkok' is clearer. 'High prices' is incorrect word choice for tall buildings; use 'high rises' or 'skyscrapers'. 'Make a feel crowded' is ungrammatical; the correct structure is 'make it feel crowded' (use the dummy pronoun it). Suggestions: choose precise nouns ('high rises'), remove redundant words, and use correct object ('it') with 'feel'.

× Naturally no, because uh, I'm not social person.

✓ Naturally no, because I'm not a social person.

Missing article 'a' before 'social person' causes ungrammatical noun phrase. Also extraneous filler 'uh' can be removed in writing. Suggestion: include indefinite article with singular countable nouns: 'a social person'. Always write full forms in formal responses.

× I like to only to see the buildings there are so impressive to look.

✓ I only like to look at the buildings because they are so impressive.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and extra 'to'. Correct structure: 'like to look at' + object, and reposition 'only' before the verb. Also use 'because they are so impressive' rather than 'there are so impressive to look'. Suggestion: use 'look at' for viewing objects and place adverbs like 'only' before the main verb.

× But I prefer take potassium.

✓ But I prefer to take photos.

'Prefer' should be followed by 'to' + verb or gerund; also 'take potassium' is semantically wrong — likely intended 'take photos'. Suggestion: use correct verb and object: 'prefer to take photos' or 'prefer taking photos'. Ensure vocabulary matches meaning.

× I would like to visit ancient buildings because when I see them makes me so memorable and.

✓ I would like to visit ancient buildings because when I see them they make me feel nostalgic.

Original sentence has missing subject in the subordinate clause and incorrect adjective use ('memorable' is wrong for feeling). Correct form: 'when I see them they make me feel...' Use appropriate adjective like 'nostalgic' or 'moved'. Also remove trailing 'and'. Suggestion: include subject 'they' after the clause and use 'make me feel' + emotion adjective.

× They own culture.

✓ They show the culture of the place.

'They own culture' is ungrammatical: verbs like 'own' don't collocate with 'culture' in this context. Likely intended 'they show the culture' or 'they reflect the local culture'. Suggestion: use verbs 'reflect', 'show', or 'represent' when describing how buildings convey culture.

× No, I would prefer to live in a house rather than building.

✓ No, I would prefer to live in a house rather than in a building.

Missing article and preposition: 'rather than building' is incorrect; use 'rather than in a building' or 'rather than a building'. Also keep the article 'a' before 'building'. Suggestion: when comparing locations, include preposition 'in' for parallel structure or include article: 'rather than a building'.

× I don't like a crowded place so my house offers me more privacy and the place I can relax.

✓ I don't like crowded places, so my house offers me more privacy and is a place where I can relax.

'A crowded place' is acceptable but plural 'crowded places' fits general preference. Sentence lacks verb in the final clause: 'the place I can relax' needs 'is a place where I can relax' or 'where I can relax'. Also unnecessary 'me' after 'offers'. Suggestion: use 'is a place where' to form relative clause and ensure verbs are present.