建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct small grammar errors, and add one specific detail. Use linking words if giving an extra reason.

範例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in the city centre. For example, there is a shopping mall tower two blocks away, so I often walk past it when I go shopping.

建議: Make the response grammatical and specific. Use a clear topic sentence, correct quantifiers (a few vs. many), and give a reason or example using a linking word. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings when I go out with friends. For instance, I like photographing interesting facades and cityscapes because they show local architecture and atmosphere.

建議: Answer directly about a specific building you would like to visit (or revisit). Use past and future tense correctly, avoid unclear phrasing, and add a reason why you want to visit with one specific detail.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the Police Museum in Beijing. I went there once and enjoyed the historic architecture, so I would like to go again to see the exhibits and learn more about its history.

建議: Give a clear opinion and a specific reason. Start with a concise topic sentence, then add one concrete benefit (e.g., view, location, facilities) using a linking word like 'because' or 'for example.' Avoid vague phrases and repetition.

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it would offer great views of the city. For example, living on a high floor would let me see the skyline and be close to shops and public transport.

× Yeah, sure, there are many tall buildings near my home because my home is in the center of the city, so I often tell.

✓ Yeah, sure, there are many tall buildings near my home because my home is in the center of the city.

Remove 'so I often tell' because it is ungrammatical and unnecessary here; the sentence already states the reason. 'Tell' needs an object and context; likely the speaker intended 'I often go there' or 'I often see them', so use a complete verb phrase if needed.

× I often see some tall buildings near my home and I usually get there to go shopping.

✓ I often see tall buildings near my home and I usually go there to go shopping.

Use 'go there' rather than 'get there' in this context; 'get there' is acceptable but 'go there' is more natural. Also remove 'some' when referring to a general observation. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× Yeah, sure, I often take few photos of building when I go out with my friend.

✓ Yeah, sure, I often take a few photos of buildings when I go out with my friends.

Use 'a few' to indicate a small number (not 'few') and plural 'buildings' to match 'photos of' multiple items. Also 'friend' should be plural if meaning going out with friends in general, or keep singular with 'my friend' consistently; adjust accordingly.

× I often I'd like to take so much photos such as buildings and scanneries something.

✓ I often like to take many photos of buildings and scenery.

Fix modal/tense redundancy ('I often I'd like' is incorrect) by using 'I often like'. Use 'many photos' not 'so much photos'. 'Sceneries' is incorrect plural; use 'scenery'. Remove 'something' which is vague.

× I like police museum building in Beijing city when I get there.

✓ I like the Police Museum building in Beijing when I go there.

Use the definite article 'the' before a specific named building. Capitalize proper name 'Police Museum'. Use 'go' rather than 'get' for visiting and omit redundant 'city' after 'Beijing'.

× At first I went there and I saw some beautiful buildings.

✓ When I first went there, I saw some beautiful buildings.

Reword to natural past narrative: 'When I first went there' rather than 'At first I went there'. Keep past simple 'went' and 'saw' for completed actions.

× They're so tall and and so many people there.

✓ They are so tall and there are so many people there.

Complete the second clause with a verb: 'there are so many people' rather than leaving out 'are'. Remove duplicated 'and and'.

× Yeah, sure. I really want to live in a tall building because in general in a tall building maybe in the center of the city and there are so many beautiful buildings and so many people there.

✓ Yeah, sure. I really want to live in a tall building because tall buildings are often in the center of the city, where there are many beautiful buildings and many people.

Simplify and correct sentence structure: use 'tall buildings are often' instead of awkward 'in general in a tall building maybe'. Use 'where there are' to connect location and existence. Maintain present simple for general truth and preference.