建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, use correct grammar (singular/plural, articles), and give one or two specific details. Use linking words like “for example” or “also” to organize details.

範例: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home, including a hospital and a few office towers. For example, the hospital’s glass facade can be seen from my street, and the office towers light up at night.

建議: Answer directly, correct verb tense, reduce repetition, and provide a short specific example. Use linking words (for example, recently) and clearer vocabulary (modern architecture, photograph).

範例: Yes, I often photograph buildings when I find their architecture interesting. For example, last week I took pictures of a newly renovated modern house and sent them to my brother because I liked the clean lines and glass windows.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and one concise reason why. Avoid hesitations and clarify any restrictions. Use specific description and linking words such as “because” or “however.”

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the new cultural center near our house because its façade is very striking and it hosts interesting exhibitions. However, I heard that access inside is restricted, so I would check their visiting hours first.

建議: Be careful with extreme or unclear statements. State your preference succinctly, give a reasonable reason, and avoid repetition and dramatic language. Use correct grammar and neutral vocabulary (fear of heights, safety concerns).

範例: No, I wouldn’t like to live in a tall building because I have a fear of heights and I worry about safety during emergencies. I prefer a low-rise house where I feel more secure and can leave quickly if needed.

× Yes, there are a lot of tall building near my homes, which is is like a skyscrapers, uh uh, it was a a hospital, uh, that that is a tall buildings thing and and is you can see from that building the whole whole.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of tall buildings near my home, which are like skyscrapers. For example, there is a hospital that is a tall building, and you can see the whole area from that building.

Multiple errors involve singular/plural mismatch: 'a lot of tall building' should be 'a lot of tall buildings' (plural noun after 'a lot of'). 'homes' should be singular 'home' if referring to one home. 'a skyscrapers' mixes singular article with plural noun; correct to 'skyscrapers' or 'a skyscraper'. 'a tall buildings thing' is incorrect; use singular 'a tall building' or plural structure. Suggestion: decide whether each noun is singular or plural and ensure determiners and verbs match the number. Next steps: review noun forms and accompanying articles/determiners (a/an, the, this, these, those) and ensure consistency.

× Yes, there are a lot of tall building near my homes, which is is like a skyscrapers, uh uh, it was a a hospital, uh, that that is a tall buildings thing and and is you can see from that building the whole whole.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of tall buildings near my home, which are like skyscrapers. For example, there is a hospital that is a tall building, and you can see the whole area from that building.

Subject-verb agreement: 'which is like a skyscrapers' is incorrect because 'which' refers to 'tall buildings' (plural) so the verb should be 'are', not 'is'. Similarly, 'it was a a hospital' is awkward; use 'there is/there was a hospital' depending on tense. Suggestion: match verb number to its subject (singular subjects take singular verbs; plural subjects take plural verbs). Also simplify clauses to avoid repeated words.

× And so I take I took photograph of that building and show it to my brothers, for example, like the other day, I will.

✓ And so I take photographs of that building and show them to my brothers. For example, the other day I took some photos.

Mixed tenses and incorrect noun form: 'took photograph' should be 'took photographs' or 'took a photograph'. Also 'I take I took' repeats present and past; choose one tense. 'I will' at the end is incomplete. Suggestion: use consistent tense (present habitual 'I take photographs' or past 'I took photographs the other day') and pluralize countable nouns when appropriate.

× Yes, I would like to visit a building that is is is recently built that was was near our house, which is is quite, uh, quite amazing to see from the outside. So I would like to go in that buildings in bed at that building is is restricted to.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit a building that was recently built near our house, which is quite amazing to see from the outside. However, I would like to go inside, but that building is restricted.

Article and noun errors: 'a building that is recently built' should be 'a building that was recently built' (or 'that is recently built' with present). Repetition removed. 'go in that buildings in bed' is ungrammatical; use 'go inside that building'. 'is restricted to' is incomplete; say 'that building is restricted' or 'access to that building is restricted'. Suggestion: remove filler words, choose correct tense, and use articles ('a', 'the') correctly before singular countable nouns.

× Of course not, because I I'm I have a trauma of a living in a tall big building because when the a great happens and all of the peoples die in in that building. So I I'm afraid I I might not I don't want to live in in a in a tall buildings rather than.

✓ Of course not, because I have a trauma about living in a tall building. If a disaster happens, many people could die in that building. So I'm afraid; I don't want to live in a tall building.

Modal and auxiliary problems and word choice: 'might not I don't want' mixes modals; choose one form. 'have a trauma of a living' is incorrect collocation; use 'trauma about living' or 'fear of living'. 'the a great happens' unclear; likely 'a great disaster happens' or 'a disaster happens'. 'peoples' should be 'people'. Suggestion: use modal verbs correctly and avoid stacking auxiliaries; use natural collocations ('afraid of', 'afraid to') and correct plural 'people'.