建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, avoid irrelevant or incorrect words (e.g., ‘Sao’ seems wrong) and give one specific detail. Use a linking word if adding a second detail.

範例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. For example, one apartment tower close to my building has over 30 floors, and several office skyscrapers are visible from my balcony.

建議: Avoid absolute phrases like ‘Not at all’ if you sometimes do something; be natural. Use correct collocations (e.g., ‘appeal to me’), and keep answers within 2–3 sentences. Give a brief reason and one example.

範例: Not really — buildings don’t appeal to me because I’ve grown up in a large city. I usually take photos of landscapes, such as parks and rivers, because I prefer natural scenes.

建議: Answer directly with the building name or a clear description; if you can't recall the name, say so briefly and give a precise reason for visiting. Fix repetition and grammar (e.g., ‘I think I can see’). Use one linking phrase.

範例: I’d like to visit The Shard in London. I can’t remember the exact name, but it’s the tallest building there, and I’d like to go to the viewing platform because I believe I could see a stunning view of the city.

建議: Good direct answer and clear reason. Improve grammar and fluency by using correct tense and phrasing (e.g., ‘I am worried’). Add one positive detail and contrast with a linking word to be more balanced.

範例: Yes, I would consider living in a tall building because the views and facilities would be great. However, I am worried that I might have to wait a long time for the elevator during busy hours.

× As you know, there are so many skyscrapers in Seoul and a building near my home has over 30 floors.

✓ As you know, there are so many skyscrapers in Seoul, and a building near my home has over 30 floors.

This sentence mainly needs a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' to correctly join two independent clauses. The 'there be' construction 'there are so many skyscrapers' is correct; the correction is punctuation to improve sentence structure rather than changing verb use.

× Buildings don't appeal me because I live in big city.

✓ Buildings don't appeal to me because I live in a big city.

The verb 'appeal' requires the preposition 'to' when indicating who is attracted or interested ('appeal to someone'), and the noun phrase needs the article 'a' before 'big city'. This fixes misuse of preposition/pronoun object and an article error (use 'a'). Suggestion: learn verbs that require specific prepositions and practice using articles with singular countable nouns.

× I can't feel anything when I see many buildings.

✓ I don't feel anything when I look at many buildings.

Native speakers typically say 'feel' in emotional contexts and 'look at' when describing perception of sights. 'Can't feel anything when I see many buildings' is awkward; also mixing 'see' with emotional response is less natural. The sentence structure is improved by using 'don't feel anything' for habitual state and 'look at' for visual attention. Suggestion: use 'don't' for habitual negatives and pair 'look at' with visual perception.

× Actually I usually TE take photos of beautiful landscapes.

✓ Actually, I usually take photos of beautiful landscapes.

Remove the stray 'TE' token which is not part of English. Also add a comma after 'Actually' for natural rhythm. The verb phrase 'usually take' is correct; the error was an extraneous token. Suggestion: proofread for stray keystrokes and include commas after introductory adverbs.

× I forgot the name.

✓ I forgot the name.

This sentence uses simple past to report forgetting in the past and is acceptable in context (speaking about a past moment of forgetting). No grammatical correction is needed; included to show it's correct.

× As far as I remember the building is the highest building in London.

✓ As far as I remember, the building is the tallest in London.

Add a comma after the introductory phrase 'As far as I remember'. Use 'tallest' (superlative) rather than repeating 'the highest building' which is redundant. This improves adjective usage and conciseness. Suggestion: use one superlative adjective rather than a noun plus 'building' when context is clear.

× I think if I go there, I see I can see very beautiful London's view.

✓ I think if I go there, I can see a very beautiful view of London.

Multiple errors: redundant 'I see I can see' must be reduced to 'I can see'; 'very beautiful London's view' wrongly uses possessive with 'view' and misorders adjectives—correct phrase is 'a very beautiful view of London'. Also include the article 'a'. Suggestion: avoid redundant verbs and use 'view of [place]' rather than possessive.

× Yes, living in a tall building can be a good experience for me, but one thing I worried about is that I might have to wait a long time for the elevator.

✓ Yes, living in a tall building would be a good experience for me, but one thing I worry about is that I might have to wait a long time for the elevator.

Two issues: tense and verb form. 'Can be' is acceptable but 'would be' better expresses hypothetical desire. More importantly 'one thing I worried about' mixes past tense 'worried' with present context; use present simple 'worry' for current concern. Also maintain consistent modal choice ('might have to'). Suggestion: match tense for ongoing concerns (use present simple) and choose modal ('would') for hypothetical situations.