建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류와 미완성 문장이 있습니다. 먼저 주제문으로 간단히 답한 뒤(예: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home.), 연결어를 사용해 이유를 덧붙이세요(예: because/so). 구체적인 정보(건물의 용도, 높이, 분위기 등)를 하나나 두 개 추가해 내용을 풍부하게 하고, 문장을 완성하세요. 발음과 억양을 신경 써서 'Yoyo Station'과 'finance companies'를 명확히 말하세요.

範例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live close to Yoyo Station. For example, the area has several office towers that house banks and finance companies, so the skyline looks quite modern and busy.

建議: 문법(현재 습관 표현, 관사/복수)과 어순에 주의하세요. 주제문은 간결하게 말하고 이어서 빈도와 조건을 구체적으로 설명하세요. 연결어(usually, but, when)를 정확히 사용하고 반복되는 단어를 피하세요. 또한 'another countries' 대신 'other countries' 또는 'another country'를 사용하세요.

範例: I don't usually take photos of buildings, but I sometimes do when I travel to other countries. For instance, on holidays I like to photograph historic churches and old townhouses because they show the local culture.

建議: 응답이 단편적이고 문법 시제·구조에 오류가 있습니다. 주제문에서 명확한 의사(예: Yes, I've always wanted to visit La Sagrada Familia in Barcelona.)를 표현하고, 이유와 배경(언제부터, 어떤 점이 특별한지)을 구체적으로 덧붙이세요. 'I read'처럼 미완성 문장은 피하고, 관련 세부사항(건축가, 스타일 등)을 한두 문장으로 설명하면 좋습니다.

範例: Yes, I've wanted to visit La Sagrada Familia in Barcelona since I was ten. I first saw photos of Gaudí's unique architecture in a book, and I'm fascinated by its intricate facades and the way light fills the interior.

建議: 답변이 중간에 끊기고 논리적 근거 제시가 부족합니다. 먼저 명확한 주제문으로 답을 말한 뒤(예: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building.), 이유를 두세 개의 구체적인 포인트로 제시하세요(예: safety concerns, lack of garden, noise). 연결어(because, however, also)로 문장을 연결하고 문장을 완성하세요.

範例: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building because I prefer having a garden and outdoor space. Also, I'm concerned about noise and evacuation difficulties during emergencies, so a low-rise house would suit me better.

× Yes, I like to say there are a lot of tall buildings because my home is nearby Yoyo Station.

✓ Yes, I would say there are a lot of tall buildings because my home is near Yoyo Station.

The original uses 'I like to say' which is awkward; 'I would say' is more natural. Also 'nearby' should be 'near' to describe location relative to 'my home.' Use 'near' before a noun and 'nearby' as an adverb or adjective (e.g., 'a nearby station'). Suggestion: Use 'I would say' for opinions and 'near' to indicate proximity.

× Yoyo station has a lot of finance companies, which.

✓ Yoyo Station has a lot of finance companies.

The clause ending with 'which' is a sentence fragment and incomplete. Remove the dangling 'which' or complete the relative clause (e.g., 'which provide many jobs'). Suggestion: Avoid leaving a relative pronoun without completing the clause.

× Umm, I'm not usually take photos of buildings but sometimes, like when I travel another countries then I I prefer to take photos of buildings.

✓ Umm, I don't usually take photos of buildings, but sometimes when I travel to other countries I prefer to take photos of buildings.

'I'm not usually take' mixes present continuous and simple present; use simple present 'I don't usually take'. 'Travel another countries' is missing preposition and has wrong number: use 'travel to other countries'. Remove duplicate 'I'. Also comma placement improved. Suggestion: Use 'don't usually' + base verb for habitual actions and 'travel to other countries' for movement between countries.

× Yes, since I was 10 years old, I always want to go la sagrada familia in Spain.

✓ Yes, since I was 10 years old, I have always wanted to go to La Sagrada Família in Spain.

When an action started in the past and continues to the present, use present perfect ('have wanted'). 'Always' fits with present perfect here. Use 'go to' with places and capitalize proper name 'La Sagrada Família'. Suggestion: Use present perfect for ongoing desires and include 'to' before a destination.

× I. Read.

✓ I have read about it.

The fragment 'I. Read.' is ungrammatical. A complete sentence should be used, e.g., 'I have read about it' or 'I read about it.' Use appropriate tense depending on context. Suggestion: Avoid single-word sentence fragments; provide a full clause.

× Uh, I have. Thought these questions but my answer is I don't want to live in a tall building because if I live in a tall building.

✓ Uh, I have thought about these questions, but my answer is that I don't want to live in a tall building because...

The original has a broken sentence: 'I have. Thought these questions' is fragmented. Combine into 'I have thought about these questions.' Also end of sentence 'because if I live in a tall building' is incomplete; it needs the reason (e.g., 'because I would feel isolated' or finish the clause). Suggestion: Combine fragments into full sentences and complete 'because' clauses with the reason.