建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more accurate with grammar and keep the answer concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct noun forms and article use, and add one brief supporting detail. Avoid redundancy and ensure natural word order.

範例: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home because I live in Kota Kinabalu, Sabah. For example, many modern office towers and shopping complexes line the main road, which makes the area feel very urban.

建議: Simplify your sentences and correct vocabulary and grammar. Use one or two clear supporting reasons with linking words (e.g., because, and). Avoid repetition and unclear metaphors; if you use a metaphor, make it concise and accurate.

範例: Yes, I often photograph buildings because I admire their architecture and shapes. For example, I like taking photos of skyscrapers since their height and design inspire me and remind me to aim higher in life.

建議: Be concise and avoid repetition. Use past or present perfect correctly for experiences, and give one specific reason why you want to visit (e.g., observation deck, architecture).

範例: Yes, I would like to visit Merdeka 118, the tallest building in Malaysia. I have never been there, and I want to see its unique structure and go to the observation deck for panoramic views of Kuala Lumpur.

建議: Remove filler words, correct sentence structure and article use, and keep it within two or three sentences. Give one specific supporting detail about the view or convenience to strengthen the answer.

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall apartment, preferably on a high floor, because I would have a great view of the city. Also, living higher up feels quieter and more private, which I prefer.

× Yes, they are some tall building near my home because I live in the city which is the Korakunabalu Sabah.

✓ Yes, there are some tall buildings near my home because I live in Kota Kinabalu, Sabah.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'they are' is incorrect for existence (use 'there are') so map to pronoun problem and 'some tall building' should be plural 'some tall buildings' to match plural noun. Also the place name was corrected to 'Kota Kinabalu' and a comma added before the state. Suggestion: use 'there is/there are' for existence and make noun number agree with the verb; use proper noun spelling. (Grammar problem type ID: 12)

× Yes, I like taking pictures of building because I like the architectures of the building and I like seeing the towering skyscrabble just standing in front of me and take a picture as a memory.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of buildings because I like the architecture and I enjoy seeing the towering skyscrapers standing in front of me and taking a picture as a memory.

Errors: 'pictures of building' needs plural 'buildings' (quantifier/number); 'architectures' is incorrect here, use uncountable noun 'architecture'; 'skyscrabble' is misspelling, should be 'skyscrapers' (plural) and 'take a picture' should be 'taking a picture' to match parallel gerund structure. Suggestion: keep nouns in correct singular/plural form, use uncountable form 'architecture' and parallel verb forms when listing activities. (Grammar problem type ID: 14)

× And it's often remind me that to aim higher and I want to be as strong as like the as a building because you can stand against the wind and move.

✓ And it often reminds me to aim higher, and I want to be as strong as a building because it can stand against the wind and not move.

Errors: 'it's often remind me' should be 'it often reminds me' (subject-verb agreement and verb form); 'that to aim higher' is incorrect—use 'reminds me to aim higher'; 'as strong as like the as a building' is ungrammatical and redundant—use 'as strong as a building'; 'you can stand' is unclear—refer to the building with 'it' and use 'not move' for intended meaning. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement, remove redundant words, and keep pronoun reference clear. (Grammar problem type ID:20)

× Yes, I really want to visit Merdeka 118, which is the tallest building in Malaysia. I never visit this before and I really want to visit because of the structure and it was the highest building in Malaysia.

✓ Yes, I really want to visit Merdeka 118, which is the tallest building in Malaysia. I have never visited it before and I really want to go because of its structure; it is the tallest building in Malaysia.

Errors: 'I never visit this before' should be present perfect 'I have never visited it before' to express experience up to now. 'Visit' repeated—use 'go' to avoid repetition or 'visit' with correct form. 'it was the highest' uses past tense incorrectly; since it still holds, use present 'it is the tallest'. Also use 'its structure' (possessive) instead of 'the structure'. Suggestion: use present perfect for life experiences and present tense when describing current facts. (Grammar problem type ID:5)

× Yes, I would love to live in a tall building like the tall apartment because umm if I live in a tall building which is in the highest floor of the apartment, I can see the view. The I can have the best view of the city and I just like it.

✓ Yes, I would love to live in a tall building, for example a tall apartment, because if I live on the highest floor, I can see the view. Then I would have the best view of the city and I would enjoy it.

Errors: 'like the tall apartment' is awkward—use 'for example a tall apartment' or 'a tall apartment'; 'which is in the highest floor of the apartment' is incorrect preposition and structure—use 'on the highest floor'; repetition and tense inconsistency: 'I can see the view. The I can have'—change to 'Then I would have' for conditional politeness matching 'I would love'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('on' for floors), ensure conditional/modal consistency ('would' for hypothetical desires), and avoid filler words. (Grammar problem type ID:4)