建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct inaccuracies. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct the phrasing about views (use 'doesn't allow' instead of 'allows') and avoid redundancy.

範例: Yes — there are several tall buildings near my home because I live close to the city centre. For example, a new high-rise is being constructed opposite my house. I don't really like the skyline since it blocks views of the trees and distant mountains.

建議: Start with a direct answer, then give one or two concise, well-linked reasons. Fix grammar (e.g., 'I don't usually take such pictures' not 'I don't used to') and use more natural vocabulary like 'landscapes' instead of 'sceneries'.

範例: No, I don't usually photograph buildings. Instead, I prefer taking landscape photos, such as mountains or birds in trees, because I enjoy natural scenery more than urban architecture.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and add a specific reason linked with a connective. Correct grammar and word choice ('Empire State Building', 'crowded', 'on my to‑do list'). Avoid short fragmented sentences.

範例: Yes — I would like to visit the Empire State Building because it is an iconic landmark. I visited New York once but didn't go inside because it was too crowded, so I have added it to my travel to‑do list.

建議: Answer directly, then provide a specific reason with a linking word. Improve fluency by removing fillers ('um', 'uh') and use correct phrasing ('a one- or two‑storey house').

範例: No, I wouldn't. Because I'm worried about earthquakes, I would feel anxious living in a tall building. For that reason, I prefer a one- or two‑storey house where I would feel safer.

× in front of my home they are constructing a tall building.

✓ In front of my home they are constructing a tall building.

No change in wording needed; sentence uses present continuous correctly to describe an ongoing action. Suggestion: keep subject and verb order for clarity: 'They are constructing a tall building in front of my home.' (Note: This entry is included because the original had acceptable tense but could be reordered for naturalness.)

× I don't enjoy much that view because it allows the exposure to trees and mountains and sunsets.

✓ I don't enjoy that view much because it blocks the view of trees, mountains, and sunsets.

The adverb placement 'enjoy much that view' is unnatural; 'enjoy that view much' or 'don't enjoy that view much' is correct. Also 'allows the exposure to' is incorrect and unclear; use 'blocks the view of' or 'doesn't allow me to see'. Suggestion: use natural collocations: 'enjoy that view' and 'blocks the view of'.

× I would like to take pictures about sceneries and mountains and maybe some birds that are on trees and that's the reason why I don't used to take those pictures.

✓ I would like to take pictures of scenery and mountains and maybe some birds in the trees, and that's why I don't usually take pictures of buildings.

Use 'pictures of' not 'pictures about'. 'Scenery' is an uncountable noun; use singular. 'Birds that are on trees' should be 'birds in the trees'. 'Don't used to' is incorrect: use 'don't usually' to express habit. Also clarify object 'those pictures' to 'pictures of buildings'.

× I've been once in New York City and I didn't visit it because it was really crowd.

✓ I have been to New York City once, and I didn't visit it because it was really crowded.

Use 'have been to' for visiting a place and place 'once' after auxiliary. 'Crowd' is a noun; the adjective is 'crowded'. Also keep consistent present perfect 'have been' with 'once' placement. Suggestion: 'I have been to New York City once, and I didn't visit it because it was really crowded.'

× So I just put that in my wish To Do List.

✓ So I just put it on my wish-to-do list.

Word order and capitalization are incorrect. Use pronoun 'it' to refer to visiting the building. Preposition 'on' is correct for lists. 'wish To Do List' should be 'wish-to-do list' or 'wish list'. Suggestion: use 'wish list' or 'to-do list' depending on meaning.

× if I'm living in a tall building, I would be scared all the time.

✓ If I lived in a tall building, I would be scared all the time.

This conditional expresses a hypothetical situation. Use the past simple 'lived' in the if-clause with 'would' in the main clause (second conditional). Using 'I'm living' suggests a real ongoing situation, which is inconsistent. Suggestion: use 'If I lived...' for unreal present situations.

× That's the reason why I prefer to live in a home of one or two, umm, pieces.

✓ That's the reason why I prefer to live in a home with one or two rooms.

'A home of one or two pieces' is incorrect; 'pieces' is not used for rooms. Use 'with one or two rooms' or 'a one- or two-bedroom home'. Suggestion: use appropriate nouns for house parts: 'rooms' or 'bedrooms'.