建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct minor grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail. Avoid filler words like "like."

範例: No, my home is near the countryside, so there aren’t many tall buildings. For example, the tallest structures nearby are two- or three-storey houses rather than high-rise flats.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, explain the reason with a specific detail, and avoid repetition. Use a linking word to connect reason and example.

範例: Not really. I prefer photographing landscapes because they feel more interesting; for instance, I enjoy capturing sunsets over fields rather than close-ups of buildings, which I find less appealing.

建議: Provide a clear, slightly more structured response: state the building, give a brief past experience, then a precise reason why you want to return. Avoid filler words and repeat adjectives.

範例: Yes, I would love to visit the Eiffel Tower in France again. I went there a few years ago as a child, so I don’t remember much; therefore I want to return to enjoy the panoramic view from the top and take better photos of Paris.

建議: Start with a clear statement and give one concise reason with a specific detail. Avoid colloquial contractions and incomplete sentences; finish your thought and use linking words.

範例: No, I wouldn’t want to live in a tall building because I have a strong fear of elevators. For example, I feel anxious every time I ride one, so living on a high floor would make daily life stressful.

× Actually my home is like near to the countryside so we don't have lots of tall buildings.

✓ Actually my home is near the countryside, so we don't have many tall buildings.

'Near to' is incorrect here; use 'near' without 'to' when indicating proximity. Also 'lots of' is informal and 'many' is more appropriate with the countable noun 'tall buildings'. Use a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'so' connecting two independent clauses.

× Not really, because I prefer to take a photo of the view, not the buildings, because buildings.

✓ Not really, because I prefer to take photos of the view, not photos of buildings.

The plural noun 'photos' should be used when speaking generally. Repeating 'because buildings' is incomplete and redundant; replace with the clear contrast 'not photos of buildings'. This fixes sentence structure and clarity.

× Just when I take a photo of buildings it doesn't really look cool.

✓ When I take photos of buildings, they don't usually look very interesting.

The original has awkward phrasing and a pronoun reference issue. Use plural 'photos' and refer back with 'they' for clarity. 'Look cool' is conversational; 'look very interesting' is grammatically smoother. Add a comma after the introductory clause.

× Yeah, I would love to visit Eiffel Tower, which is located in France.

✓ Yeah, I would love to visit the Eiffel Tower, which is located in France.

Landmarks like 'Eiffel Tower' normally take the definite article 'the' in English. Omitting 'the' is incorrect in this context.

× Actually, I've been there like a few years ago, but I went there when I was too young.

✓ Actually, I went there a few years ago, but I was too young then.

The present perfect 'I've been there' conflicts with the specific past time 'a few years ago'; use simple past 'I went there'. Also streamline the second clause to 'I was too young then' for natural past reference.

× So I want to go back there again because the only thing I remember was that the view up there was really good and really fascinating.

✓ So I want to go back because the only thing I remember is that the view from up there was really good and fascinating.

Use present tense 'is' when referring to a current desire and memory. 'Go back there again' is redundant; 'go back' suffices. Use 'view from up there' for clearer prepositional phrasing.

× To be honest, I don't really wanna live in a tall building because I have a trauma of like taking an elevator so I don't have a good memory of elevator.

✓ To be honest, I don't really want to live in a tall building because I am afraid of taking elevators, so I don't have good experiences with them.

Avoid informal 'wanna' in formal correction; use 'want to'. 'Have a trauma of' is unnatural—use 'am afraid of' or 'have a fear of'. 'Taking an elevator' should be plural 'elevators' when speaking generally. 'I don't have a good memory of elevator' is incorrect; use 'I don't have good experiences with them'.

× But when I live in a tall building, I have to use the elevator every day and I don't want to ride an elevator because.

✓ But if I lived in a tall building, I would have to use the elevator every day, and I wouldn't want to ride elevators because I'm afraid of them.

Use the conditional 'if I lived... I would' to express a hypothetical situation. Keep verb forms consistent. Complete the sentence by stating the reason: 'because I'm afraid of them.' Use plural 'elevators' for general reference.