建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời thiếu tự nhiên và có lỗi ngữ pháp; cần trả lời trực tiếp, ngắn gọn và rõ ràng, sử dụng liên từ hợp lý để nối câu. Nên tránh cụm từ không rõ nghĩa như “And to leave” và dùng thì phù hợp. Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể về phong cảnh có thể làm câu trả lời sinh động hơn.

範例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home because I grew up in a mountainous area. Instead, my house is surrounded by several high peaks, and from my window I can see a ridge covered with pine trees.

建議: Câu trả lời rối, ngắt quãng và nhiều lỗi phát âm/ngữ pháp; cần mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sử dụng từ vựng đúng (skyscraper), và giải thích ngắn gọn lý do. Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu, dùng liên từ để mạch lạc.

範例: Yes, I do. One of my hobbies is photographing buildings, especially skyscrapers, because I admire modern architecture. Taking photos relaxes me, and I feel proud to capture landmarks that represent my country.

建議: Câu trả lời rất không rõ ràng, nhiều câu không có nghĩa; cần trả lời trực tiếp tên tòa nhà hoặc loại công trình muốn thăm, kèm lý do cụ thể và mô tả ngắn gọn. Sử dụng cấu trúc đơn giản, tránh lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp. Nên nêu ví dụ một tòa nhà ở thành phố rõ ràng (ví dụ: Landmark 81).

範例: I would like to visit Landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City because it is one of the tallest buildings in Vietnam. I want to see the observation deck and photograph the city skyline, especially at sunset when the glass facade reflects the light.

建議: Câu trả lời dài dòng, lặp từ và bỏ dở; cần bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No), nêu 1–2 lý do cụ thể với liên từ hợp lý và kết luận ngắn. Tránh câu chưa hoàn chỉnh và dùng thì phù hợp (depend on elevators).

範例: No, I wouldn’t like to live in a tall building. I find them inconvenient because you have to rely on elevators, which can be slow or crowded, and I prefer houses with easy access to outdoor space.

× And to leave, there are no tall buildings near my home as I was born in a mountainous area.

✓ To be clear, there are no tall buildings near my home because I was born in a mountainous area.

'There be issue' refers to use of 'there are' structure. The original sentence's leading phrase 'And to leave' is incorrect and confusing. Replace with 'To be clear' and use 'because' to show reason. Keep 'there are no tall buildings' which correctly uses the there-construction for existence.

× So instead of tall buildings, there are a wide range of high mountains surrounding my home.

✓ So instead of tall buildings, a wide range of high mountains surrounds my home.

The problem is with the 'there are' construction and subject-verb agreement. 'A wide range' is a singular noun phrase and requires singular verb 'surrounds'. Removing the extra 'there are' makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× Well personally take photo of buildings in my favorite hobbies is I prefer to take photos of a skycropper because I love the modern architecture of my countries and it's it's also helped me to relax and to proud of my country.

✓ Personally, one of my favorite hobbies is taking photos of buildings; I prefer to photograph skyscrapers because I love modern architecture in my country, and it also helps me relax and feel proud of my country.

This sentence has multiple structure problems: missing subjects, incorrect word order, wrong verb forms ('take photo' -> 'taking photos', 'skycropper' -> 'skyscrapers'), and tense/verb agreement ('it's it's also helped' incorrect). Use 'one of my favorite hobbies is taking...' and 'it also helps me relax and feel proud'. Use singular 'country' and correct noun 'skyscrapers'.

× I prefer to take photos of a skycropper because I love the modern architecture of my countries

✓ I prefer to take photos of skyscrapers because I love the modern architecture of my country

Preposition and noun usage: 'of my countries' is incorrect because 'my country' is the intended singular noun; 'a skyscraper' vs 'skyscrapers' number should match intent. Use plural 'skyscrapers' if photographing many buildings, and 'my country' as singular.

× it's it's also helped me to relax and to proud of my country.

✓ it also helps me relax and feel proud of my country.

Tense and verb form: 'helped' is past tense but context implies habitual present. Use present 'helps'. Also 'to proud' is wrong; the correct structure is 'feel proud'. Remove duplicate 'it's'.

× Well, my hobby is either I can go to the land make everyone in Ho Chi Minh cities a city.

✓ Well, my hobby is visiting places in Ho Chi Minh City to see how the city has developed.

Original is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Either I can go to the land make everyone in Ho Chi Minh cities a city' is incoherent. Clarify intention: visiting places to see urban development. Use 'Ho Chi Minh City' singular and proper verbs.

× I connect architecture that's so how modern victims are and in in afternoon it's free.

✓ I appreciate architecture and how modern the buildings are, and in the afternoon they are beautiful in the sunlight.

Many words misused: 'connect' -> 'appreciate', 'victims' incorrect, 'in in' duplicate, and 'it's free' unclear. Rephrase to express appreciation of modern architecture and mention afternoon sunlight makes them look beautiful.

× It's reflections of sunlight make or human city much more colorful and beautiful.

✓ The reflections of sunlight make our city much more colorful and beautiful.

Preposition/pronoun errors: 'It's' should be 'The', 'or human' is incorrect for 'our', and word order fixed. Use 'The reflections of sunlight' as subject and plural verb 'make'.

× Well, personally, if I don't want to live in a tall building is is I think it's much more inconvenient because I had to depend on the elevators, which is sometimes too slow for me to use it.

✓ Personally, I would not want to live in a tall building because I think it would be inconvenient; I would have to depend on elevators, which are sometimes too slow.

Modal and conditional use: use 'would not want' to show preference, not 'if I don't want'. 'I had to depend' should be conditional 'I would have to depend'. Remove redundant 'is is' and avoid ending with 'use it'. Ensure plural agreement 'elevators... are'.

× Moreover, I think that's how buildings are is not appropriate to me because I'm.

✓ Moreover, I think tall buildings are not appropriate for me because of these reasons.

Sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical. 'that's how buildings are is not appropriate to me because I'm.' is wrong. Complete the thought: say 'tall buildings are not appropriate for me' and add reason or 'because of these reasons'.