建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more concise and natural by starting with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid overlong phrases and minor grammar issues (e.g., "every direction I turn" → "in every direction").

範例: Yes. I live in Beijing, so there are skyscrapers all around. For example, from my apartment window I can see several tall office towers and a landmark mall to the south.

建議: Reduce hesitations and combine ideas into two or three fluent sentences. Use precise vocabulary and link ideas (e.g., "because", "so") to show coherence. Avoid repeating similar adjectives.

範例: Yes, I often photograph buildings because I love the way their glass and metal facades reflect the sky. In particular, I take pictures at sunset when the colors create dramatic reflections.

建議: Be accurate and avoid uncertain or incorrect facts; if unsure, say so clearly and give a plausible reason. Keep it concise and avoid repetition ("just last month" twice). Use linking words to connect your reasons.

範例: Yes. I would like to visit Taipei 101 because it was once the tallest building and has an impressive design. I heard recently that a climber attempted an ascent, which made me more interested in seeing it in person.

建議: Begin with a direct statement and then give one or two specific benefits. Shorten long sentences and avoid filler phrases like "of course" or "I think". Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example") to make the reason clear.

範例: Yes — I already do. I live in a building with over 30 floors, and I enjoy the view because I can see the city skyline and nearby parks from my balcony.

× the city is littered with skyscrapers, so I can see tall buildings every direction I turn.

✓ the city is littered with skyscrapers, so I can see tall buildings in every direction I turn.

The phrase 'every direction I turn' needs the preposition in to form the adverbial phrase 'in every direction'. Without 'in' the phrase is ungrammatical. Suggestion: place the preposition before 'every direction' to make the expression idiomatic.

× the beauty of the skyscrapers appeal to me aesthetically.

✓ the beauty of the skyscrapers appeals to me aesthetically.

The subject 'the beauty' is singular, so the verb must be singular 'appeals' (third person singular). The plural noun 'skyscrapers' is part of a prepositional phrase modifying 'beauty' and does not change the verb. Suggestion: match the verb to the head noun of the subject.

× I know this building because I think that a climber just climbed it by hand just last month.

✓ I know this building because I think that a climber climbed it by hand last month.

The verb phrase contains two instances of 'just' and uses 'just climbed' which is simple past; the extra 'just' before 'last month' is redundant. Also 'just climbed it by hand just last month' is wordy. Correction removes the redundant 'just' and keeps simple past 'climbed' appropriate for a completed action. Suggestion: avoid repeating adverbs and use one time marker.

× I would love to visit the highest building in the world, which I believe is in Taipei.

✓ I would love to visit the tallest building in the world, which I believe is in Taipei.

While 'highest' is not strictly wrong, 'tallest' is the more idiomatic adjective when comparing vertical extent of buildings. Use 'tallest' to describe a building's vertical measurement. Suggestion: prefer 'tallest' for buildings.

× At the moment it has more than 30 floors and of course I love living there because one of the benefits of living in a tall building is that you can look out over the city and see almost any place you want, which is really impressive I think.

✓ At the moment, it has more than 30 floors, and of course I love living there because one benefit of living in a tall building is that you can look out over the city and see almost anywhere you want, which I think is really impressive.

The original sentence is long and awkwardly punctuated. Improvements: add commas for clarity, change 'one of the benefits' to 'one benefit' to avoid redundancy, use 'anywhere' rather than 'any place' for naturalness, and move 'I think' earlier to 'which I think is really impressive' for smoother word order. Suggestion: break long sentences with commas and choose more natural adverbial choices.