建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 質問に直接答えている点は良いですが、冗長な表現や声の合間（um、uh）が多く、文法ミス（主語・動詞の一致、過剰な重複）があります。改善点は①不要なフィラー（um、uh）を減らす、②簡潔なトピック文を作る（1文目で結論）、③具体的な補足を1～2文で述べる、④文法（there is/are、that has → that have）を正すことです。

範例: No, there are no tall buildings near my home. I live in a low-rise residential area where buildings are usually only two or three storeys. For example, most houses here are two-storey family homes, so the skyline is quite low.

建議: 意味は伝わりますが、語順・文法の誤りや語彙選択の問題、繰り返しが多いです。改善点は①簡潔な肯定・否定表現を使う（Yes/No + frequency）、②主語と動詞の一致（they has → they have）、③“historical”の使い方を正す（historically important / with historical significance）、④具体例を一つ加えることです。

範例: I don't take photos of buildings very often, but I sometimes photograph ones with historical significance. For instance, I took several photos of an old town hall last year because of its ornate façade and interesting history.

建議: 意欲と経験を述べている点は良いですが、口語表現が多く文法や時制のミスがあります。改善点は①口語の“wanna”を避け“would like”や“I want to”を使う、②時制を整理する（I visited / I have been）、③文を簡潔にまとめる、④最終的な希望を明確にすることです。

範例: I'd like to visit the Sagrada Familia in Barcelona again. I went there about two years ago, but it wasn't completed at that time, so I'd like to see the finished building in the future.

建議: 理由を挙げて拒否している点は良いですが、話し言葉が多く文がまとまっていません。改善点は①“wanna”やフィラーを避ける、②明確に2つの理由を提示する（各理由を1文で）、③必要なら具体例を示す（例：エレベーターの待ち時間）、④文法を整えることです。

範例: I wouldn't like to live in a tall building for two reasons. First, it can be inconvenient when I'm in a hurry because waiting for the elevator takes time. Second, I prefer having easy access to outdoor space, which is harder in high-rise apartments.

× Umm no there are not.

✓ Umm, no, there are not any.

'There are not' is grammatical but often needs an object like 'any' in negative statements to sound natural: use 'there are not any' or 'there aren't any'. Use commas for pauses.

× There are not any tall buildings near my home 'cause I live in the residential area and in my area.

✓ There are not any tall buildings near my home because I live in a residential area.

'Cause' is informal; use 'because'. 'The residential area' is wrong here: use 'a residential area' because you are speaking generally. Remove 'and in my area' as redundant.

× In my living area, umm no buildings that has over 3 floors are required to build.

✓ In my neighborhood, buildings taller than three floors are not allowed to be built.

'Living area' is unnatural; 'neighborhood' is better. 'Buildings that has' is incorrect subject-verb agreement and relative clause: use 'buildings that have' or better 'buildings taller than three floors'. 'Are required to build' is wrong meaning; use 'are not allowed to be built'.

× Not always or usually bad.

✓ Not really, usually not.

This fragment is ungrammatical and unclear. Combine ideas: 'Not really, usually not' or 'Not often' to answer frequency questions.

× I sometimes take photos of buildings when they are the historical they has they have historical meanings or the the the importance building that tell us the historical.

✓ I sometimes take photos of buildings when they are historical or have historical significance.

Remove redundancy and fix verb errors: 'they has' is incorrect; use 'they have' or better 'have'. Use 'historical significance' instead of repetitive phrasing. Keep sentence concise.

× Well, I wanna go, I wanna visit the Sagrada Familia in Barcelona, Spain.

✓ Well, I want to visit the Sagrada Familia in Barcelona, Spain.

Use 'want to' in formal responses instead of 'wanna'. Combine repetitions into one clear statement.

× Umm, I have been there once about two years ago.

✓ I went there once about two years ago.

'Have been' with a specific time expression 'about two years ago' is incorrect; use the simple past 'went'.

× However, the this time the buildings isn't uh, completely built.

✓ However, at that time the building wasn't completely built.

Use past tense 'wasn't' to match 'about two years ago'. 'The buildings' should be singular 'the building' for Sagrada Familia, and 'completely built' is fine.

× So I someday I wanna see that the.

✓ So someday I want to see it finished.

Fix word order and pronoun: 'see that the' is ungrammatical. Use 'see it finished' or 'see it when it's finished'. Avoid 'wanna'.

× I don't wanna live in a tall building cut uh, for the Li for two reasons.

✓ I don't want to live in a tall building for two reasons.

'wanna' is informal; 'cut uh, for the Li' seems to be speech disfluency—remove. Keep 'for two reasons'.

× The 1st is umm, the When I'm in a hurry, it takes a long time to go out of the building.

✓ The first is that when I'm in a hurry, it takes a long time to get out of the building.

Use 'the first' not 'The 1st'; include 'that' after 'is'. 'Get out of' is more natural than 'go out of'. Remove filler words.

× It's inconvenient.

✓ It's inconvenient.

This sentence is correct. No change necessary; keep as final sentence.