建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct repetition/word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid repeating words (e.g., “high rise rising”). Also correct small grammar issues and punctuation.

範例: Yes. I live in a 30‑storey apartment building, so there are several tall towers around me. For example, three of the neighboring blocks are over 20 storeys high, which makes the area feel very urban.

建議: Improve sentence flow and use linking words to connect reasons. Fix small grammar errors and be more specific about equipment or examples to strengthen the answer.

範例: Not usually. I find it difficult to capture architectural details with my camera, so I prefer photographing people or natural scenes when I travel. For example, I often take pictures of mountain ranges and coastal landscapes because they look more impressive in photos.

建議: Correct repetition and vocabulary errors, and finish incomplete sentences. Use one clear reason and one specific supporting detail. Avoid filler words and mispronounced or misspelled terms (e.g., "ban banadramic").

範例: Yes, I would like to visit Taipei 101 in Taiwan because many friends have posted photos there. I want to take the same picture at that exact spot and ride the high‑speed elevator to enjoy the panoramic view from the observation deck.

建議: Make the reason clear and grammatically correct. Provide one specific example or consequence to support your opinion and use a linking phrase to introduce it.

範例: No, I prefer low‑rise housing. For example, in an emergency such as a fire, evacuating from lower floors would be much easier and safer than getting out from a very high floor.

× I myself live in a 30 story apartment building so I'm surrounded by many high rise rising towers and a few blocks nearby.

✓ I myself live in a 30-story apartment building, so I'm surrounded by many high-rise towers and a few blocks.

Plural/singular and compound-word formatting: '30 story' should be hyphenated as '30-story' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. 'high rise rising towers' is redundant and incorrect; use 'high-rise towers' (hyphenated) and keep 'towers' plural. 'a few blocks nearby' is acceptable but clearer without 'nearby' at the end. Suggestion: use hyphens for compound adjectives and avoid redundant words.

× No, I don't usually take a lot of photos a building scene.

✓ No, I don't usually take a lot of photos of building scenes.

Preposition 'of' is required after 'photos' to indicate what the photos are of. Also 'a building scene' is unnatural; use the plural 'building scenes' or 'of buildings'. Suggestion: use 'photos of' + plural noun for general statements.

× I prefer photographing people or natural scenes when I travel, for example the mountains or landscape, because they feel more impressive.

✓ I prefer photographing people or natural scenes when I travel, for example mountains or landscapes, because they seem more impressive.

Word choice and number agreement: 'the mountains or landscape' is mismatched; use plural 'mountains or landscapes' for parallelism. 'feel' is acceptable but 'seem' is more natural for impressions. Also drop 'the' before general nouns. Suggestion: keep parallel structure and consistent plurality.

× I would I would like to visit Taipei 101 in Taiwan because I've seen many photos of my friends posting in front of that landmark.

✓ I would like to visit Taipei 101 in Taiwan because I've seen many photos of my friends posing in front of that landmark.

Redundancy and word choice: duplicated 'I would' is an error (sentence structure). 'posting' is not the best verb for taking photos; use 'posing' to describe being photographed. The present perfect 'I've seen' is correct. Suggestion: remove duplicate words and choose verbs that match the intended meaning.

× Then I would love to take the same picture that exact spot.

✓ Then I would love to take the same picture at that exact spot.

Preposition 'at' is required to indicate location: 'at that exact spot'. Also 'that exact spot' order is correct; original missed 'at'. Suggestion: use 'at' for specific locations.

× I am so curious to ride its high speed elevator and enjoy the ban banadramic view from the.

✓ I am so curious to ride its high-speed elevator and enjoy the panoramic view from there.

Multiple errors: 'high speed' should be hyphenated as 'high-speed' when used as a compound adjective. 'ban banadramic' is garbled; the intended word is 'panoramic'. The sentence also ends with an incomplete prepositional phrase 'from the.' Replace with 'from there' or 'from the top'. Suggestion: use correct adjectives, avoid typing errors, and complete prepositional phrases.

× No, I prefer low rise housing because if I get cutting from high floors during a fire or other emergency would be much harder.

✓ No, I prefer low-rise housing because escaping from high floors during a fire or other emergency would be much harder.

Several issues: 'low rise' should be hyphenated as 'low-rise' when used as a compound adjective. The clause 'if I get cutting from high floors' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'escaping from high floors' or 'getting out of high floors'. Also the conditional structure is wrong: remove 'if' or rephrase. Suggestion: use 'escaping' or 'getting out' and a clear conditional or simple statement: 'because escaping from high floors ... would be much harder.'