建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use plural/singular), avoid repetition, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Include one specific detail and a linking word for coherence (e.g., “For example,”). Also correct tense and structures: say “I work on the 42nd floor” instead of “I'm walking on the floor 42.”

範例: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home. For example, my office is in a high-rise and I work on the 42nd floor, which feels quite high and a little scary at times.

建議: Answer directly, avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., “city skyline,” not “greetings”), and connect ideas with a linking phrase such as “because” or “so.” Keep it to 2–3 clear sentences and finish the thought fully.

範例: Yes, I sometimes take photos of buildings because Tokyo’s skyline is impressive. When I visit the city center, I often photograph interesting skyscrapers and street scenes to remember them.

建議: Give a specific building name if possible, or describe it clearly. Avoid hesitations and contradictory phrases. Use a topic sentence then one supporting detail (reason why). Keep it concise and grammatically correct.

範例: Yes. I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is the tallest building in the world and offers spectacular views from its observation deck.

建議: Respond directly and give a clear reason with correct vocabulary (e.g., “I'm afraid of heights,” “I feel dizzy”). Avoid repetition and fillers. Use one or two supporting sentences with linking words like “because” or “however.”

範例: Not really, because I am afraid of heights and often feel dizzy in very tall buildings. However, I can work in my tall office because I try to avoid looking out the windows too often.

× Yes, there is.

✓ Yes, there are.

The question asks about 'tall buildings' (plural). 'There is' is singular; use 'There are' for plural nouns to match number agreement.

× my office is very tall building.

✓ My office is a very tall building.

The noun phrase is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'very tall building'. Also capitalize 'My' at the start. Use 'a' with singular countable nouns.

× I I'm walking on the floor 42, it is too high.

✓ I was on the 42nd floor; it felt very high.

Context refers to a past experience, so past tense 'was' and past feeling 'felt' are appropriate. Also use ordinal '42nd floor' and punctuation to separate clauses. Remove duplicate 'I'.

× It was a bit scary for me.

✓ It was a bit scary for me.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable as past tense describing a past feeling; no change needed.

× I sometimes take photos of greetings because there are many huge buildings in Tokyo, so that skyline is impressive.

✓ I sometimes take photos of buildings because there are many huge buildings in Tokyo, so the skyline is impressive.

'Photos of greetings' is incorrect; likely meant 'photos of buildings'. Use 'the skyline' not 'that skyline' when referring to a general well-known skyline. 'Because' clause and result clause are fine otherwise.

× And when I go to city area, I yeah, sometimes take photos of the.

✓ When I go to the city area, I sometimes take photos of them.

Add definite article 'the' before 'city area' and remove filler 'yeah'. 'Photos of the' is incomplete; replace with 'photos of them' or 'photos of the buildings' to complete the object.

× Yes, there are some for example, I want to visit uh, Dubai and I forgot the exact name, but I want to the tallest building in the world tourist tower in the world.

✓ Yes, there are some. For example, I want to visit Dubai and the tallest building in the world, the Burj Khalifa.

Run-on sentence with missing articles and unclear noun phrases. 'There are some' is vague but acceptable; split into sentences. Add 'the' before 'tallest building' and supply correct name 'the Burj Khalifa' for clarity. Remove redundant 'in the world' repetition.

× Yeah, it must be there.

✓ Yes, it must be there.

Minor: change 'Yeah' to 'Yes' for formality and clarity. 'Must be there' is acceptable to express assumption.

× Not really because I I'm scary if I go to a tall toll force.

✓ Not really, because I get scared if I go to a tall tower.

'I'm scary' is incorrect; use 'I get scared' or 'I am scared'. 'tall toll force' is garbled; likely 'tall tower'. Use commas for clarity.

× I tend to, uh, feel unwell when I go to building, but my office is very tall place.

✓ I tend to feel unwell when I go to a building, but my office is a very tall place.

Add 'a' before 'building' and before 'very tall place' for singular countable nouns. Remove filler 'uh' and keep present tense 'tend to feel' which matches habitual situation.

× So yeah, it is. It is.

✓ So yeah, it is.

Duplicate sentence 'It is.' is redundant. Keep a single clause for clarity and natural speech.