建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, avoid repetition, and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail. Watch noun/verb agreement and avoid repeating words.

範例: Yes. There are many tall, modern buildings near my home. For example, a new glass tower on Main Street looks particularly impressive at night because its lights reflect off the river.

建議: This answer is good but tighten some grammar and phrasing, and break into two concise sentences using linking words. Use correct article and noun forms and avoid run-on sentences.

範例: Yes. Yesterday I photographed a modern building near my office because of its curved glass façade and spherical lights. I took shots from different angles to capture the reflections and the dramatic shadows.

建議: Be direct and clear: give the building name correctly, avoid filler words, and provide a specific reason. Use one or two well-formed sentences and correct articles.

範例: Yes. I would like to visit the Empire State Building in New York because I have seen many photos of its observation deck and I want to see the city views in person.

建議: Clarify your ideas and correct grammar. Start with a direct answer, then give one or two clear reasons. Avoid unclear abbreviations and complete your sentence. Use linking words like 'because' correctly.

範例: Yes. I would like to live in a tall building downtown because the amenities are excellent and it would be close to shops and public transport.

× Yes, there are plenty of tall buildings around my home and it looks so stunning and modern when I see that building buildings.

✓ Yes, there are plenty of tall buildings around my home, and they look very stunning and modern when I see them.

Errors: singular/plural mismatch and unclear reference. 'Tall buildings' is plural, so the following pronoun and verb must match plural: use 'they look' not 'it looks'. The phrase 'that building buildings' is redundant and unclear; replace with 'them' to refer to the buildings. Also add a comma before 'and' to join independent clauses. Suggestion: ensure pronouns and verbs agree in number with their nouns and avoid repeating nouns unnecessarily.

× Yes, yesterday I took some photos of a building near my office and it looked very modern and unique because it's curved glass facade and ball lighting, and I took pictures from different angles to capture the reflections and dramatic shadows.

✓ Yes, yesterday I took some photos of a building near my office. It looked very modern and unique because of its curved glass facade and spherical lighting, and I took pictures from different angles to capture the reflections and dramatic shadows.

Errors: missing preposition/possessive and awkward noun forms. Use 'because of its curved glass facade' (possessive 'its' and preposition 'because of'). 'Ball lighting' is unnatural; use 'spherical lighting' or 'ball-shaped lights'. The original sentence was long and run-on; split into two sentences for clarity. Maintain past tense consistently. Suggestion: check possessive forms for parts of a thing and simplify long sentences.

× Yeah, I have. I'll, I would like to visit and the Empire building in New York and, uh, I saw many pictures on online of it, this building and my dream is one day I will visit that place.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the Empire State Building in New York. I have seen many pictures of it online, and my dream is that one day I will visit that place.

Errors: incorrect article/name and preposition use, awkward structure. Use the correct name 'Empire State Building' and the article is not needed before the proper name. 'On online' should be 'online' or 'on the internet'. Remove filler 'I'll' and extra conjunctions to form clear sentences. Also add 'that' after 'dream is' for clarity. Suggestion: use correct proper names, avoid redundant words, and place prepositions correctly.

× Yes I want to live in tall building which located in the downtown of the UP and because the UMM wipe is so good and the location is near any market and.

✓ Yes, I want to live in a tall building located in the downtown area of the city because the amenities are good and the location is near a market.

Errors: missing article 'a' before 'tall building', incorrect relative clause ('which located' should be 'which is located' or reduced to 'located'), unclear abbreviations 'UP' and 'UMM wipe' and wrong quantifier 'any market'. Also sentence fragment ending with 'and'. Replace unclear terms with 'city' and 'amenities' for meaning. Use 'near a market' rather than 'near any market'. Suggestion: include necessary articles, use correct verb in relative clause, avoid unknown abbreviations, and finish sentences fully.