建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Clarify and correct facts, use proper grammar and concise structure. Begin with a topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid irrelevant words and be accurate about names and measurements.

範例: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home; for example, a 100‑storey tower called Trans Towers about 200 metres from my house. It houses the local police station and is a prominent landmark in our neighborhood.

建議: Give a clear direct answer and organize details with linking words. Correct vocabulary and names, avoid filler words, and be specific about when and why you take photos. Keep to 2–4 sentences maximum.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings, especially at night because the city lights look beautiful from the tower. For example, during the Spring Festival I visited the main observation tower three times to photograph the night skyline and festive lights.

建議: Answer directly, correct the building name and grammar, and give a specific reason and plan using linking words. Mention when and why you plan to visit to make it concrete.

範例: Yes. I would like to visit the Shanghai Oriental Pearl Tower because I love Shanghai's skyline and culture. I plan to go this year to see the observation deck and learn more about the city's history.

建議: Give a clear opinion with a reason, avoid incorrect words (e.g., 'toilet building'), and use linking words to compare options. Be concise and grammatical, stating pros and cons briefly.

範例: I would prefer living in a mid‑rise building rather than a very tall tower because lower buildings are quieter and more convenient. However, if a tall building offers good facilities and safety, I might choose it for the views and amenities.

× Yes, there's a tall building, police buildings in southeast China.

✓ Yes, there are tall buildings, police buildings, in southeast China.

Incorrect use of 'there's' (there is) with a plural noun. Use 'there are' for plural subjects. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'there are' when referring to multiple buildings.

× We called Trans Towers, which in 200 meters and have 100 floors.

✓ We call it Trans Towers; it is 200 meters tall and has 100 floors.

Sentence lacks a main verb structure and misuses 'which' and 'have'. Use a clear subject ('it') with verbs 'is' and 'has'. Use '200 meters tall' to describe height and 'has 100 floors' for possession.

× Yeah, I think so much photos of Sean's showers like especially in the night because from the tower has a gorgeous scene in the evening.

✓ Yes, I have taken many photos of the city's skyscrapers, especially at night, because the view from the tower is gorgeous in the evening.

Incorrect quantifier 'so much photos' should be 'many photos' for countable nouns. 'Sean's showers' appears to be incorrect word choice; likely 'city's towers' or 'skyscrapers'. Also fix word order and add correct verb phrases: 'have taken' or 'take' and 'the view from the tower is'. Ensure noun agreement and natural collocations.

× Uh, during the Spring Festival vacation, I visited John's tower for nearly three times and take.

✓ During the Spring Festival vacation, I visited John's tower nearly three times and took photos.

Use past tense consistently: 'visited' and 'took' are past tense. 'for nearly three times' is awkward; use 'nearly three times' or 'about three times'. Also complete the sentence with the object 'photos'.

× Yeah, my favorite building in China is Shanghai Mingzhu Tower, which located in Shanghai and is also my favorite city.

✓ My favorite building in China is the Shanghai Mingzhu Tower, which is located in Shanghai, and Shanghai is also my favorite city.

Missing verb 'is' after 'which' (There be/type 3 interplay) and unclear reference 'is also my favorite city'—specify 'Shanghai'. Also add the definite article 'the' before named towers for natural English.

× So I think I will go to visit Shanghai into Tower this year.

✓ So I think I will visit the Shanghai Mingzhu Tower this year.

Incorrect preposition 'into' and awkward phrase 'go to visit'; use 'visit' directly. Use the full proper name for clarity and present future intention 'will visit' is fine.

× If I live in a toilet building in the nearest buildings I I think is a best choice, but if not I think of a three floor or 4 floors buildings is a better choice.

✓ If I could live in a tall building nearby, I think it would be the best choice; otherwise, I think a three- or four-floor building would be better.

Multiple issues: 'toilet building' is incorrect word choice—likely 'tall building'; word order and redundancy ('in the nearest buildings I I') must be fixed. Use conditional structure 'If I could...' or 'If I lived...' with appropriate modal 'would' for hypothetical. Use singular agreement 'a three- or four-floor building' and consistent adjectives before 'building'.

× If I live in a toilet building in the nearest buildings I I think is a best choice, but if not I think of a three floor or 4 floors buildings is a better choice.

✓ If I lived in a tall building nearby, I think it would be the best choice; if not, I think a three- or four-floor building would be better.

Adjective order and form: use 'three- or four-floor building' as a compound adjective before the noun. Use 'the best' (superlative) correctly with 'would be'. Also use 'nearby' as the correct adverb/adjective and replace wrong word 'toilet' with 'tall'.