建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, umm, repetitions) and incorrect grammar ("most tallest"). Give one specific example with a brief description using correct vocabulary and linking words. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes. My house is surrounded by several tall buildings. For example, the Keangnam Landmark Tower in Hanoi is the tallest skyscraper nearby and is easily visible from my window.

建議: Answer directly and give a clear reason with coherent language. Avoid repeating phrases and unclear sentences. Use linking words (because, so) and provide a concise supporting detail or example to justify your opinion.

範例: No, I rarely take photos of buildings because I think it would be a waste of time. For instance, I prefer photographing people or nature, which I find more interesting and meaningful.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence naming the building, then add two specific supporting details (location, features, reason). Avoid vague phrases and filler. Use linking words (for example, because, and) and correct word forms (restaurants).

範例: Yes, I would like to visit Lamas 72 in southern Hanoi. It is a large complex with several restaurants and hotels, and I want to try the variety of traditional dishes offered there because I love sampling different cuisines.

建議: Respond clearly and give a coherent reason using correct vocabulary. Avoid repeating, unclear words (Tobin, scared of attitude) and maintain logical structure: topic sentence + reason + brief example if needed. Use linking words (because, so, therefore).

範例: No, I would not want to live in a tall building because I feel uncomfortable with heights. Therefore, I prefer living in a low-rise apartment or house where I feel safer and less anxious.

× My house is surrounded by several buildings, uh, building, for instance, umm, but for instance, the most tallest, tallest, MMM skycraper, uh, in Hanoi is noted building tower, which we wish.

✓ My house is surrounded by several buildings; for instance, the tallest skyscraper in Hanoi is the noted Building Tower.

Original sentence repeats words and uses both 'most tallest' which is incorrect (double superlative). 'Skyscraper' was misspelled. Also 'building tower' needs an article and a clear name. Use plural 'buildings' is correct; change 'the most tallest' to 'the tallest' and streamline the sentence for clarity. Grammar problem type id: 1

× No, actually I don't take any photos of buildings.

✓ No, actually I don't take photos of buildings.

'Take any photos' is acceptable but 'any' is unnecessary here; not a grammatical error per the list, so minimal correction to improve naturalness. The verb 'take' as present simple fits the habitual action. Grammar problem type id: 10

× I think it is big because I think it is very waste of time.

✓ I think it's a waste of time.

Original has redundant phrases and incorrect use of 'big' with 'waste of time'. Correct structure is 'it's a waste of time.' This fixes sentence structure and article use. Grammar problem type id: 26

× From waste my time to take some meaningless photo, I bring it.

✓ Taking meaningless photos wastes my time, so I don't do it.

Original phrase order is incorrect and ungrammatical. Use gerund 'Taking' as subject, correct verb 'wastes', and natural word order. Also use plural 'photos' and add contrast clause 'so I don't do it.' Grammar problem type id: 18

× Yes, it is some beauty.

✓ Yes, it is beautiful.

'Some beauty' is awkward and ungrammatical here; use the adjective 'beautiful' to describe the building. This fixes pronoun/adjective misuse. Grammar problem type id: 12

× Although some building I would like to visit is uh Llamas 72 which is located in the southern Hanoi.

✓ One building I would like to visit is Lamas 72, which is located in southern Hanoi.

Use 'one building' instead of 'some building' for a single example. Remove 'the' before 'southern Hanoi' and fix the name spelling to 'Lamas 72'. Also place commas correctly and use 'which' for non-defining clause. Grammar problem type id: 12

× It is a complex with several restaurant and hotel.

✓ It is a complex with several restaurants and hotels.

Use plural nouns 'restaurants' and 'hotels' after 'several'. This fixes article/number agreement. Grammar problem type id: 22

× I want to try some traditional food around the world in here.

✓ I want to try traditional foods from around the world here.

Use 'from around the world' to indicate origin of foods and place 'here' at the end. Also use plural 'foods' for variety. Grammar problem type id: 11

× No, I don't like to I don't want to live in the Tobin is because it's very little.

✓ No, I don't want to live in the tower because it's very small.

Remove repeated fragments. Use 'tower' (or the correct building name) and 'small' instead of 'little' for size. Ensure subject-verb agreement and sentence coherence. Grammar problem type id: 2

× I I am very scared and scared of attitude.

✓ I am very scared of heights.

'Scared of attitude' is incorrect; likely intended 'scared of heights'. Use singular 'I am' once. This corrects word choice and adjective use. Grammar problem type id: 13

× So I I like to stay at flat house to to be safe for my before me.

✓ So I prefer to live in a flat to feel safe.

Original has repetition and unclear phrase 'safe for my before me'. Simplify to 'prefer to live in a flat to feel safe.' This fixes sentence structure and clarity. Grammar problem type id: 26